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you write very well, i look forward to the rest of the story!
Great start
I am waiting for and looking forward to the rest of this story , and the others that you write.
Surprised.
With your introduction I didn't expect to like this submission at all but this beginning is really excellent. I suspect that if it continues in the same vein I may grow to love this series!
Good start
I was confused at the beginning, between Rachel/Beauty/Alex/Draven but once that was sorted out it was easy to follow and nicely done.
Interesting beginning
Now let's see where you take it.
Keep up the good work!
Can't wait for the next few chapters! Keep up the good work!
I like it but,
?! is not english grammar and should never be used. Also, when writing dialouge a comma goes before the end quotation if you are adding she said or something similar.
Example: "You need to get a life you stupid cow," Alex berated herself.
Okay im done with the nitpicking. I realy enjoyed the story and you should definately continue writing.
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