Mary's Second Date Ch. 02

You Sir

Are very fucking gay.

Too much Too soon

That is just my first impression for this chapter. Still an interesting story because it does suit some of my personal head turners. The husband just doesn't seem to react with the force in his emotions that these three or four big, big, WOW surprises demand.

Seeing a hard dick between the legs of a beautiful woman is not something that brings out a nonchalant "You got one of those too" response, I know that for a fact. Lover telling husband "Enjoy your last sex with your wife, I'm the only one who does her from now on" would have to bring more violent, not necessarily physical, reaction. Wife and lover walking in on husband and T making out in the pool is a chapter in itself to cover all the motions on four sides. The condom and pregnancy issue is so too glossed over. Those are some of the things I mean by Too much Too soon.

I know that I prefer a longer story; I have been roundly criticised for writing with too much length and repetition developing characters and how they get to where they are in life, but you have glossed over too much and left too many assumptions to the reader for my taste. That is just my humble opinion though, and we all know what folks say about opinions.

Having laid out the shortcoings, let me reinforce my pleasure with your story. Just as a personal preference, I love a story about husband and wife working through the turmoil and tension of wife or husband having an outside lover; I always have and always will find this kind of story a turn on. I also find outside lovers (for both parties) a very natural appendage to a successful marriage. I think you have a good story going and I just wish you would tell your story in a little more detail.

Changes in life style too soon

I would agree with BobNBobbie in that if both partners are in agreement with their lifestyle then whatever they agree to is acceptable. In this case though it sounds like decisions are being made for the husband by the wife and lover that he doesn't want. Personally as soon as I was told that I wouldn't be making love to my wife anymore I would have filed for divorce after telling her this was unacceptable as it was nowhere near what was originally agreed upon between the two of them.

Well that was a good story about a non-man and a totally selfish bitch of a wife, and a lover that needs to die a painful and slow death. Why doesn't the husband just do himself a favour and shoot himself or cut off his own balls. And the wife isn't sorry and doesn't love or respect her husband in anyway. The Marriage is dead.

Can you write something original or....

....don't bother? Why copy a formula?

Jake the fool

Jake has lost his wife and Mary is extremely happy to be James slut and to have him be the only one to make love to her. Mary has told Jake that he is too small for her. At this point if I was Jake and since he has lost Mary to James and he will never be allowed to make love to her again it is time to rethink things out for the rest of his life. I certainly believe he will find out that he now has no future with Mary and that he may want to restart with someone that he will be able to love and have a physical relationship with that person. To have that person be his lover, companion and best friend. In Mary he had his lover and best friend and companion. Now Mary's first love will be James, the one she will touch to comfort, not Jake. I sense Jake is not happy with the changes and it will be hard but best to sever his ties with Mary which will be hard for him but not for her as she now has a strong and maybe stronger bond with james. Nicely written and wonderful story how easy it is to lose the one you love.

Boring as hell!

Christ - even JPB puts a little twist to his consistent dogshit and author you should at least think about. Yea, it sucks!

Too Far

Too far out for me. You develop a couple of interesting characters, then take a good marriage, add one asshole, shake well, and destroy the marriage and create some weird slut, wimp husband, and dominate male crap. Sorry, not my type of story. You are an OK writer, but the whole storyline pretty much sucks.

No Way

No way should a spouse allow their husband or wife to make such a decision involving them without discussion. She and her lover have made a decision that totally affects the marriage and him without any discussion. Therefore, in spite of any other sexual tension created by "others", the marriage should be over. Of course that is my opinion, and the direction I would take the story. The next step would be seeing a divorce lawyer and having her served. I really hate to see a marriage go down the tubes, but she and her lover have already destroyed this marriage.

NO NO NO

No, I can't believe where you are taking this story. A marriage of what, 20 years, a loving husband and a good relationship, and you are destroying it all. She takes the marriage and and the husband and dumps both in the garbage can and all she has to say about it is "I'm sorry about this Jake, I really am." I hate this story. She dumps Jake, Jake sits there and takes it, and you justify it by her saying she is a "slut", so what......lots of sluts still love their husbands and don't "cut them off" because some jerk with a big penis tells them too. Did I mention I hate this story...hate what you are doing to the marriage and really really really hate James, not to happy with Jake either for sitting there atn taking it.

This has been gay since the first installment

but at least it was on the margins. Now the hub has acquiesced all his marital rights and heterosexuality, to full blown cuck and fag. 1*