I liked this story. It didn't mess around too much getting going and got straight to business. I really want to see the daughter/slave relationship developed in future chapters. Keep writing.
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Anonymous05/26/10
Let The Training Begin
Very nice start. By all means give the approval for a friend or two to seduce her. Of course you must keep the clients happy as well. Maybe she will get that scholarship after talking to the dean or learn how to negotiate at the auto dealership. Given your penchant for brevity there are endless possibilities without you getting "burned out" on the characters. I suggest no gangbangs and take it slow and steady. Mix a little non-consent or at least reluctance on her part to sex it up with anyone except dear old dad. The fruit is always sweeter when you climb the tree to pick it. Turn this beauty out the right way and let everyone enjoy her including grandpa of course.
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Anonymous05/30/10
Hot and Fast
Very nice. A daughter slave to explore.... excellent. Forget the other men, have her bring him a harem of young ladies for him to dominate, or to help him dominate her. Perhaps he can manipulate his wife into "seducing" the daughter, too.
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Anonymous06/01/10
In fucking credible
My cock throbbed the entire time I was reading your story.
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Anonymous06/13/10
I wanna fuck mine just like she did
My stepdad is so fuckin hot....i want him all to myself irl...im stacy18_bi@hotmail.com if you wanna chat
I really appreciated the direct path to seduction. The daddy really doesn't need the oh-so-incredibly huge dick to make the story work, in fact it detracts a little, especially if they were to go anal later. I am greatly looking forward to the next installment. Great seduction, and the daughter/slave angle was well played.
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Anonymous02/09/12
ANNA/DADDY ''SLAVE''
WELL THIS IS WHAT I'VE SEEN SO MANY WRITER DO THEY FUCK UP PERFECTLY
GREAT STORY BY PUTTING A STUPID ENDING ,THIS WAS GOING JUST GREAT
UNTIL BANG YOU FUCKED UP THE LAST PARAGRAFE NO MAN IS GOING TO LET THAT HAPPEN TO HIS PRIVATE FUCKING GIRL THAT PUSHING IT TO THE OUTTER LIMITS SORRY YOU ONLY GET A 2 STARS FOR THIS ONE...................''R''....................... .
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Anonymous07/08/13
THE STORY
There was no build up at all which sucks!
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Anonymous07/12/13
Can be improved
As a story, this piece of work fails. I would suggest adding more content to slowly build up story. However, I have no problems with the sex part but the conclusion with the daughter being a slave, that's a bit weird I thought the daughter being the father's slave would be better
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Anonymous07/22/13
fuck
i really wanna fuck your daughter
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Anonymous01/17/16
Sex freak
Daughter knew what daddy wanted and needed
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Anonymous03/28/16
Could have been better
The paper thin plot is told in such a nonchalant, casual manner that we care very little about the characters, much less gain any insight. The daughter is basically a pornstar family daughter (i.e. sex object). Dad acts like your average depraved, sociopath. Its all perfectly normal to him to molest, fuck and then contemplate pimping out his daughter. Another fine day in suburbia... Add the ubiquitous cliché of an 18 yr old woman constantly saying "Daddy" all the time and we have a pretty forgettable story. There are flashes of heat, but for the most part, it reminded me of the Seven Mary Three song, Cumbersome.
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Great start
I liked this story. It didn't mess around too much getting going and got straight to business. I really want to see the daughter/slave relationship developed in future chapters. Keep writing.
Let The Training Begin
Very nice start. By all means give the approval for a friend or two to seduce her. Of course you must keep the clients happy as well. Maybe she will get that scholarship after talking to the dean or learn how to negotiate at the auto dealership. Given your penchant for brevity there are endless possibilities without you getting "burned out" on the characters. I suggest no gangbangs and take it slow and steady. Mix a little non-consent or at least reluctance on her part to sex it up with anyone except dear old dad. The fruit is always sweeter when you climb the tree to pick it. Turn this beauty out the right way and let everyone enjoy her including grandpa of course.
Hot and Fast
Very nice. A daughter slave to explore.... excellent. Forget the other men, have her bring him a harem of young ladies for him to dominate, or to help him dominate her. Perhaps he can manipulate his wife into "seducing" the daughter, too.
In fucking credible
My cock throbbed the entire time I was reading your story.
I wanna fuck mine just like she did
My stepdad is so fuckin hot....i want him all to myself irl...im stacy18_bi@hotmail.com if you wanna chat
Great start
I really appreciated the direct path to seduction. The daddy really doesn't need the oh-so-incredibly huge dick to make the story work, in fact it detracts a little, especially if they were to go anal later. I am greatly looking forward to the next installment. Great seduction, and the daughter/slave angle was well played.
ANNA/DADDY ''SLAVE''
WELL THIS IS WHAT I'VE SEEN SO MANY WRITER DO THEY FUCK UP PERFECTLY
GREAT STORY BY PUTTING A STUPID ENDING ,THIS WAS GOING JUST GREAT
UNTIL BANG YOU FUCKED UP THE LAST PARAGRAFE NO MAN IS GOING TO LET THAT HAPPEN TO HIS PRIVATE FUCKING GIRL THAT PUSHING IT TO THE OUTTER LIMITS SORRY YOU ONLY GET A 2 STARS FOR THIS ONE...................''R''....................... .
THE STORY
There was no build up at all which sucks!
Can be improved
As a story, this piece of work fails. I would suggest adding more content to slowly build up story. However, I have no problems with the sex part but the conclusion with the daughter being a slave, that's a bit weird I thought the daughter being the father's slave would be better
fuck
i really wanna fuck your daughter
Sex freak
Daughter knew what daddy wanted and needed
Could have been better
The paper thin plot is told in such a nonchalant, casual manner that we care very little about the characters, much less gain any insight. The daughter is basically a pornstar family daughter (i.e. sex object). Dad acts like your average depraved, sociopath. Its all perfectly normal to him to molest, fuck and then contemplate pimping out his daughter. Another fine day in suburbia... Add the ubiquitous cliché of an 18 yr old woman constantly saying "Daddy" all the time and we have a pretty forgettable story. There are flashes of heat, but for the most part, it reminded me of the Seven Mary Three song, Cumbersome.
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