My Adventures in the Rose Garden

Language problems

There is nothing wrong with the premise of the story, but I found the way you set it up confusing and hard to understand, mainly due to weird grammar and lots of messed-up figures of speech. The actual description of the sex scene on the other hand was very well written, despite the gross content.

Greg has nothing on that!

It was very different and not what i was expecting at all. Knowing you though, it shouldn't have been too surprising. I love your crazy imagination! I found some parts to be quite amusing as well. Overall it was a great submission, and I look forward to reading more of your stories soon!