the sexual violence killed the story it is never needed and should be only in the nonconsent or bdsm areas not here
by
07/14/10
wow
this is a great story. i totally disagree with the person who said that the rough sex spoiled it. i look forward to reading the rest of the series. keep up the good work.
I really enjoyed the rough stuff and the the way the entire thing played out. great work
by
Anonymous01/01/11
Rough Sex.
How Orgasmic.
by
Anonymous03/12/11
Awesome. Great sex scene, and I loved the Easter egg analogy. My only complaint is that some of the sentences don't have periods at the end and just continue into the next.
The person who said this belongs in nonconsent isn't very intelligent. First of all, if it was in nonconsent then people would be complaining that it should be in the incest category. Second of all, nonconsent means that one person doesn't want it. Hence the non-consenting.
by
Anonymous03/19/11
Give the story a chance, you wont regret it.
I started chapter 1, but I stopped because it seemed to get a bit rough. Weeks later I gave it another chance, this story is truly remarkable. Read the story as a story and not for sex and you will enjoy it, (the sex is great don't get me wrong, its not all rough). I'm starting to enjoy the rough stuff too from reading the whole story. Give it a chance before you put the story aside, trust me.
by
Anonymous06/07/11
masterful!
And quite unexpected, which made it even better. You are one sexy bitch in your writing.
While I think Ch 1 could use a little tweaking, I wouldn't change a thing about the flow or general feel. Very dark, very sexy. I think I'm going to enjoy this series.
...a 'light' read.
I like it pretty much.
Especially the interior design of the bedroom. Could be mine except for the Crowley protrait and the depiiction of Dante's.
Well... And the bed annd the other expensive stuff... ;-D
this gives me a whole new idea of "taboo" and I think I like it. I've seen you around on the boards, but never really read any of your work. I'm glad that I finally have. I'm impressed.
~ABG
TAKING BROTHER BIG THICK COCK DEEP I IN HER THROAT AND PUSSY
this was an awesome very hot horny story . siblings with benefits ch 1.
i know this is going to get even more erotic as it go's on . well bring it on .
im already for even more of this brilliat story.
Those two seriously have issues. The feeling of safety you mention hits the nail on the head, it would/will? be hard for either of them to trust someone else. Love the mirrors. HOT. Always wanted one over my bead but damn they're heavy!
by
Anonymous09/02/12
very good
Damn parentheses, stopped me from giving 5
by
Anonymous11/04/12
.....OMG
That has fucking amazing! That is my new fantasy! 5 stars all the way!
by
Anonymous08/11/13
Again and again
Ive read Mark and Megans whole story through. This "first time" plays in my head again and again. So hot!! Reading it again after some time away is as great as the first. Thank you for characters, story depth and lots of hot hot sex!
by
Anonymous06/19/14
I agree with the last comment
I too am re-reading this chapter because I noticed it was rated lower than the rest. Can't understand why. This chapter hooked me into the whole series and it's even better the second time.
by
Anonymous07/17/14
Good
I was pleasantly surprised by the story. There is rough love, but it is love that is being shown, by an definition that you would choose to call it. Good character development that shows what is going on in the character's mind. I hope to read more of this detail in the future. Sincerely, PB
'Sorry I never found this little tale before. I'm not into BDSM and such, but this is just a story of NEED. Somehow the mutual and loving violence seems entirely fitting. I'll have to see if lovecraft68 was able to keep it going in remaining chapters.
emotionally difficult to read but superb writing style
My deceased wife and I volunteered at an NGO that tried to provide safe havens and access to public services for women and children victims of physical and sexual abuse.
Those pitiful victims of domestic violence left an enduring memory seared into my psyche.
So far in this story the two protagonists, of Megan and Mark are very believable from my experience. Though non of the people we tried to help ever managed to climb out of the pit our Social Darwinist society has cast them.
The author obviously has an outline, a fictional storyline that lc68 intends to unfold for us over the succeeding chapters.
All we can so is follow the clues and enjoy the journey. Or, if not enjoy, at least learn some life lessons from it.
Very heavy-handed on details, as if desperate to sell the writer's idea of 'goth' or 'dark' lifestyle and personality. No one uses the term goth to describe underground art scenes, it's only in American high schools where moody teenagers brand themselves as goth. And using 'sis' or 'little bro' instead of nicknames or proper names in incest stories make them unrealistic and again force readers that it's incest they're reading. We're not idiots, we get it the first time Megan stated she was siblings with Mark. No need to rub the fact in. Geez.
by
Anonymous07/24/16
If you want to write, you have to be 'LITERATE' !!
Your lack of education and any writing talent is showing ! 1* of course !!
I don't know what their problems are, but I thought it was pretty good. So there might be a few flaws here and there, but so what. The story is there to be enjoyed, not criticized.
I had been a proof-reader for a number of years, and I have seen a LOT worse. I have found typos & other "booboos" from professional authors who should have known better.
This story was written for fun and entertainment so treat it as such, not as if he did it to piss you off. 5*'s in my book. Thanks for a good story.
English
Damn
Fantastic! I'm still shaking. Look forward to more.
~Sara
FAN-FRICKEN-TASTIC!!!!! Love the story!!!!!
violence
the sexual violence killed the story it is never needed and should be only in the nonconsent or bdsm areas not here
wow
this is a great story. i totally disagree with the person who said that the rough sex spoiled it. i look forward to reading the rest of the series. keep up the good work.
Great story
I really enjoyed the rough stuff and the the way the entire thing played out. great work
Rough Sex.
How Orgasmic.
Awesome. Great sex scene, and I loved the Easter egg analogy. My only complaint is that some of the sentences don't have periods at the end and just continue into the next.
The person who said this belongs in nonconsent isn't very intelligent. First of all, if it was in nonconsent then people would be complaining that it should be in the incest category. Second of all, nonconsent means that one person doesn't want it. Hence the non-consenting.
Give the story a chance, you wont regret it.
I started chapter 1, but I stopped because it seemed to get a bit rough. Weeks later I gave it another chance, this story is truly remarkable. Read the story as a story and not for sex and you will enjoy it, (the sex is great don't get me wrong, its not all rough). I'm starting to enjoy the rough stuff too from reading the whole story. Give it a chance before you put the story aside, trust me.
masterful!
And quite unexpected, which made it even better. You are one sexy bitch in your writing.
- Jayded_Lust
Dark and sexy
While I think Ch 1 could use a little tweaking, I wouldn't change a thing about the flow or general feel. Very dark, very sexy. I think I'm going to enjoy this series.
wow this is dark
and the sex is raw
Not...
...a 'light' read.
I like it pretty much.
Especially the interior design of the bedroom. Could be mine except for the Crowley protrait and the depiiction of Dante's.
Well... And the bed annd the other expensive stuff... ;-D
Oh...
...I am panting! Outstanding beginning!
Wow...
this gives me a whole new idea of "taboo" and I think I like it. I've seen you around on the boards, but never really read any of your work. I'm glad that I finally have. I'm impressed.
~ABG
Yummy
Now THAT was hot!
TAKING BROTHER BIG THICK COCK DEEP I IN HER THROAT AND PUSSY
this was an awesome very hot horny story . siblings with benefits ch 1.
i know this is going to get even more erotic as it go's on . well bring it on .
im already for even more of this brilliat story.
Very Nice
Those two seriously have issues. The feeling of safety you mention hits the nail on the head, it would/will? be hard for either of them to trust someone else. Love the mirrors. HOT. Always wanted one over my bead but damn they're heavy!
very good
Damn parentheses, stopped me from giving 5
.....OMG
That has fucking amazing! That is my new fantasy! 5 stars all the way!
Again and again
Ive read Mark and Megans whole story through. This "first time" plays in my head again and again. So hot!! Reading it again after some time away is as great as the first. Thank you for characters, story depth and lots of hot hot sex!
I agree with the last comment
I too am re-reading this chapter because I noticed it was rated lower than the rest. Can't understand why. This chapter hooked me into the whole series and it's even better the second time.
Good
I was pleasantly surprised by the story. There is rough love, but it is love that is being shown, by an definition that you would choose to call it. Good character development that shows what is going on in the character's mind. I hope to read more of this detail in the future. Sincerely, PB
Like it!
This is terrific. I hadn't expected such a rapid transformation from angst-ridden to sex-driven, but it worked for me.
Whoa!
Excellent.
Terrific!
'Sorry I never found this little tale before. I'm not into BDSM and such, but this is just a story of NEED. Somehow the mutual and loving violence seems entirely fitting. I'll have to see if lovecraft68 was able to keep it going in remaining chapters.
emotionally difficult to read but superb writing style
My deceased wife and I volunteered at an NGO that tried to provide safe havens and access to public services for women and children victims of physical and sexual abuse.
Those pitiful victims of domestic violence left an enduring memory seared into my psyche.
So far in this story the two protagonists, of Megan and Mark are very believable from my experience. Though non of the people we tried to help ever managed to climb out of the pit our Social Darwinist society has cast them.
The author obviously has an outline, a fictional storyline that lc68 intends to unfold for us over the succeeding chapters.
All we can so is follow the clues and enjoy the journey. Or, if not enjoy, at least learn some life lessons from it.
5 stars! Most intense story ever!
Too much
Very heavy-handed on details, as if desperate to sell the writer's idea of 'goth' or 'dark' lifestyle and personality. No one uses the term goth to describe underground art scenes, it's only in American high schools where moody teenagers brand themselves as goth. And using 'sis' or 'little bro' instead of nicknames or proper names in incest stories make them unrealistic and again force readers that it's incest they're reading. We're not idiots, we get it the first time Megan stated she was siblings with Mark. No need to rub the fact in. Geez.
If you want to write, you have to be 'LITERATE' !!
Your lack of education and any writing talent is showing ! 1* of course !!
Bitch, Bitch, Bitch!
I don't know what their problems are, but I thought it was pretty good. So there might be a few flaws here and there, but so what. The story is there to be enjoyed, not criticized.
I had been a proof-reader for a number of years, and I have seen a LOT worse. I have found typos & other "booboos" from professional authors who should have known better.
This story was written for fun and entertainment so treat it as such, not as if he did it to piss you off. 5*'s in my book. Thanks for a good story.
Grey
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