An interesting exploration of a man's anger at being cuckolded. What do you think he would have done if he didn't have "more money than [he] could spend?" Do you think he would have been satisfied to kick her out on her ass? Well-written
No interaction, no story development, and we really don't know much about the husband. A good rant defines only a small part of a person. Still an enjoyable rant.
you put the outline of a story in the speaker's mouth. Certainly a succinct list of the reasons the marriage was over, but it was more like coming in the middle, maybe near the end, of the story. Characterization was angry but flat. I must say I too enjoy your more plotted and thoughtful stories, though if I ever need to get to the point, I will just hand over your story, get a glass of Bookers Bourbon and enjoy the evening.
I agree with others about it being a rant. It's the ammo that you want to hand to every guy going through this. It points out all the cheater's rationalizations and labels them as the BS they are. As to the outcome, that's not quite as clear. I DO want to know more about why, how long, and how she cheated. Is this a one time hook up? Could they get by it? I'm not big on reconciliations because for most situations they are not deserved and don't work. I also like the characters to make their own decisions. I'm OK with whatever decision they make as long as it fits their character and the facts in evidence. But I want to know what the facts are. I'm curious. I want to insert myself in the story to some extent. How would I feel? What actually happens is up to the author but I need some more info to connect to the story. Maybe that's why some people described it as "flat". I needed a little more of her in it and a little more of him rather than just his anger. I really like the ending. He is dead on in recognizing he will be sad for a while and yet decides that drinking isn't the answer. Life DOES go on.
I liked the dark nature of the story. We were warned fairly at the beginning. I usually count on Woodmanone for a solid "Curb-kicker". And this was - in a way. But the dark theme was the point here I believe.
I liked the RANT-concept as a story.
Thanks for another enjoyable read! I'll keep my eyes open for your next one.
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Anonymous05/31/10
down the drain?
What a waste of good Jack.
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Anonymous06/01/10
woman fucks over you good
writer still trying to justisy and be nice to the whore and tramp.
at least about the part of being used, and no desire for more. the problem is that she'll be ok with, at least for some while. at least he's gone, and too bad she leaves with anything
Would like to hear Julies side or an Epilogue.
telling how everything comes to a close for him Does he move on Does she move on or Accept her New Role of Slut.
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Anonymous02/26/11
added cost for her
She may leave with a bunch of money, but now she will need to be aware that her momey is "the" attraction, or simply an "added" attraction that will become more important to whomever. Her "why" is a "so what" and so it goes.
but you write well! This is only the second of your stories that I've read (End of an era pt.1 was the other), but both are extraordinary in their conception, in their telling, and in how far (or unfar) you chose to go with the details. I too am curious about what happens to the wife after wards, but the pleasure of reading a story so nicely written far outreaches my disappointed curiosity about the wife. (by the way, a slight point only because you mentioned it, a quotation mark at THE START of each paragraph to show that the speaker is still speaking [not at the end until the final paragraph ---to show that the speaker is finally finished] is how to do the quotes.) I admire your writing!
It is like you randomly lifted paragraphs from all the other cheating wives stories and pasted them all together, hoping a coherent whole would result.
It is a coherent whole, but it is a boring and repetitive coherent whole. I've read every paragraph listed a dozen times in other stories.
To those who would say this was just another cliched cheating wife story, I would strongly disagree. This was a realistic and poignant view of infidelity. So many of these types of stories want to deal with the psychology of why when, in essense, all that really matters is the what.
Exactly what it was supposed to be from the beginning - a simple direct rant from a man who was done and had the means and the intent to stay done and move on -
Not trite though just covered it all and said - "All done now go away". Julie's side? he did not care why should we it was his choice.
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Anonymous08/30/11
Jack Daniels
Why is the solution always emptying a bottle of whiskey or a case of beer ???
Such sluts need a crippling knee fracture to help their girlfriends understand what happens to disrespectful egomaniacal bitches who enjoy submitting to male predators.
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Anonymous09/12/11
what a waste
to end this story with him drowning his sorrows. Can't you do better than that??? I think so. You said your stories have happy endings, not this one. Alcohol is not the solution, building a new life is...
cut off your nose to spite your face, how will you smell the crap in the room when you arrive?
Someone who loves someone else can at least make time to discuss the problem in person. Sounds like the only one you love is YOURSELF!
When you cool off and realize what you (Might) have lost, how will you punish yourself. God! You're such a dumbass!
Rich
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Anonymous08/04/12
I enjoyed the rant that you wrote and have to say that it expresses just about everything that one goes through when discovering that your spouse has done you wrong. I read belknap's comment and could find some merit in it but when you get right down to it, why would any man want to drag himself through the humiliation of having a slut belittle him just to save her own ass. And that's what will happen in counseling. She will drag everthing and anything that she can find with your marriage out in the open just to belittle you every way she can.
The comment that one only loves themselves, is truismsm when it comes right down to it. You have to love yourself when you realize that your wife only loves you when she not screwing someone else. Do you really think she's saying to herself while she's doing the other guy, "Oh I love my husband so much that I will get off on this guy to make my husband happy." No she's thinking only about herself and how to please herself.
I had to laugh at the comment about how she should get nothing but her ass out of there. What most guys never know until it's too late is the law just about assures all women half of what you worked at most of your life. Unless you have a really good lawyer (and by the way most work for women because they know they will win), she will always be made to look like the woman scorned in court. Her lawyer will rake you over the coals even if you are the injured party. And if you think it's over after the day in court, think again because her lawyer will come up with more crap to take everything you have.
but I wouldn't even let the cheating slut have a penny.
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Anonymous03/04/13
a bitch
i would have a need for reveng
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Anonymous03/05/13
Trust Funds
Seriously people, it's not hard to protect large sums of assets. A contract broken is a contract you don't have to pay. Why then should marriage (a contract) result in payment when broken?
It was a good flash story.
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Anonymous05/03/13
Dummy
If you were around all the time when did the slut have a chance to cheat? PS - Where can I get a copy of "The Handbook"?
Life has its moments, this is one nightmare that we all could afford to miss. This author artfully crafted this story with a wift of emotion sweeping to the core of the pain and emotion of a final confrontation of his soon to be ex-wife. Lost love is beyond painful, and this story has captured it.
English
Not Bad.
But I damm sure wouldn't have given her any money, but thats just me.
Interesting Perspective
An interesting exploration of a man's anger at being cuckolded. What do you think he would have done if he didn't have "more money than [he] could spend?" Do you think he would have been satisfied to kick her out on her ass? Well-written
Nice Rant
Enjoyed the hell out of it. Have you ever noticed it's always easier when you got plenty of money.
It makes one think.
It makes me think that if I were the wife I would have called the police, a lawyer and a locksmith after hubby left.
C'MON!
Not much effort in this one Woody. Might be on par with your earlier works but I'm used to reading a higher quality story from you.
Are you Poizon in disguise?
Not good.
Is was a good rant, but not much of a story
No interaction, no story development, and we really don't know much about the husband. A good rant defines only a small part of a person. Still an enjoyable rant.
More like
you put the outline of a story in the speaker's mouth. Certainly a succinct list of the reasons the marriage was over, but it was more like coming in the middle, maybe near the end, of the story. Characterization was angry but flat. I must say I too enjoy your more plotted and thoughtful stories, though if I ever need to get to the point, I will just hand over your story, get a glass of Bookers Bourbon and enjoy the evening.
Short and to the point
I agree with others about it being a rant. It's the ammo that you want to hand to every guy going through this. It points out all the cheater's rationalizations and labels them as the BS they are. As to the outcome, that's not quite as clear. I DO want to know more about why, how long, and how she cheated. Is this a one time hook up? Could they get by it? I'm not big on reconciliations because for most situations they are not deserved and don't work. I also like the characters to make their own decisions. I'm OK with whatever decision they make as long as it fits their character and the facts in evidence. But I want to know what the facts are. I'm curious. I want to insert myself in the story to some extent. How would I feel? What actually happens is up to the author but I need some more info to connect to the story. Maybe that's why some people described it as "flat". I needed a little more of her in it and a little more of him rather than just his anger. I really like the ending. He is dead on in recognizing he will be sad for a while and yet decides that drinking isn't the answer. Life DOES go on.
If the cheat lovers can have a rant....
....at least this one is couched as a story.
Dark Side
There are stories that need to end on the dark side. Just sayin'. Good story. Thanks for sharing.
My guess is....
My guess is the wife fell asleep about the 5th paragraph. I almost did.
Boringgggggggggg!!!!!!!!!
ZZZZZZZZZZZZZZZZZZ.
It Was Different
I liked the dark nature of the story. We were warned fairly at the beginning. I usually count on Woodmanone for a solid "Curb-kicker". And this was - in a way. But the dark theme was the point here I believe.
I liked the RANT-concept as a story.
Thanks for another enjoyable read! I'll keep my eyes open for your next one.
down the drain?
What a waste of good Jack.
woman fucks over you good
writer still trying to justisy and be nice to the whore and tramp.
Decent Rant!
& a waste of Gentleman Jack! Boo for that!
probably right
at least about the part of being used, and no desire for more. the problem is that she'll be ok with, at least for some while. at least he's gone, and too bad she leaves with anything
SHOULD NOT HAVE GAVE HER A PENNY . DRUGGED HER AND SELL THE SLUT TO A WHOREHOUSE
Julie's Side
Would like to hear Julies side or an Epilogue.
telling how everything comes to a close for him Does he move on Does she move on or Accept her New Role of Slut.
added cost for her
She may leave with a bunch of money, but now she will need to be aware that her momey is "the" attraction, or simply an "added" attraction that will become more important to whomever. Her "why" is a "so what" and so it goes.
Jaysus, Woodmanone,
but you write well! This is only the second of your stories that I've read (End of an era pt.1 was the other), but both are extraordinary in their conception, in their telling, and in how far (or unfar) you chose to go with the details. I too am curious about what happens to the wife after wards, but the pleasure of reading a story so nicely written far outreaches my disappointed curiosity about the wife. (by the way, a slight point only because you mentioned it, a quotation mark at THE START of each paragraph to show that the speaker is still speaking [not at the end until the final paragraph ---to show that the speaker is finally finished] is how to do the quotes.) I admire your writing!
sorry...
It is like you randomly lifted paragraphs from all the other cheating wives stories and pasted them all together, hoping a coherent whole would result.
It is a coherent whole, but it is a boring and repetitive coherent whole. I've read every paragraph listed a dozen times in other stories.
Maybe I ask too much.
And by the way...
Why is it that men whose wives cheat on them appear to be far more likely to win the lottery.
Damn, I've gotta get my wife a lover. Then I can cash my lottery winnings and drop the bitch.
"Julie's side"?
My name is Julie. I'm a slut who will fuck anything with a pulse.
How's that?
Sorry but it did not light my fire
Sort of like pouring a slug of Jack and discovering on the first sip that some one watered it. No tension, no interesting or unusual insights.
A dose of realism
To those who would say this was just another cliched cheating wife story, I would strongly disagree. This was a realistic and poignant view of infidelity. So many of these types of stories want to deal with the psychology of why when, in essense, all that really matters is the what.
Yep it isd a roll up of cliche's
Exactly what it was supposed to be from the beginning - a simple direct rant from a man who was done and had the means and the intent to stay done and move on -
Not trite though just covered it all and said - "All done now go away". Julie's side? he did not care why should we it was his choice.
Jack Daniels
Why is the solution always emptying a bottle of whiskey or a case of beer ???
Such sluts need a crippling knee fracture to help their girlfriends understand what happens to disrespectful egomaniacal bitches who enjoy submitting to male predators.
what a waste
to end this story with him drowning his sorrows. Can't you do better than that??? I think so. You said your stories have happy endings, not this one. Alcohol is not the solution, building a new life is...
AND LIFE DOES GO ON
the way it should have been, and still m might. TK U MLJ LV NV
What?
Lonesome3307 said it all for me.
OOPS!!
...meant lonewolf 3307....
Good
He said it all in his soliloquy. Hopefully she will catch aids off her next crumb lover and die of aids.
HA HA HA HA HA
Dear Anonymous "What a waste"
Do you not read these things? He poured the bourbon down the sink. He's not going to be an alcoholic or drown his sorrows.
Now that you've ...
cut off your nose to spite your face, how will you smell the crap in the room when you arrive?
Someone who loves someone else can at least make time to discuss the problem in person. Sounds like the only one you love is YOURSELF!
When you cool off and realize what you (Might) have lost, how will you punish yourself. God! You're such a dumbass!
Rich
I enjoyed the rant that you wrote and have to say that it expresses just about everything that one goes through when discovering that your spouse has done you wrong. I read belknap's comment and could find some merit in it but when you get right down to it, why would any man want to drag himself through the humiliation of having a slut belittle him just to save her own ass. And that's what will happen in counseling. She will drag everthing and anything that she can find with your marriage out in the open just to belittle you every way she can.
The comment that one only loves themselves, is truismsm when it comes right down to it. You have to love yourself when you realize that your wife only loves you when she not screwing someone else. Do you really think she's saying to herself while she's doing the other guy, "Oh I love my husband so much that I will get off on this guy to make my husband happy." No she's thinking only about herself and how to please herself.
I had to laugh at the comment about how she should get nothing but her ass out of there. What most guys never know until it's too late is the law just about assures all women half of what you worked at most of your life. Unless you have a really good lawyer (and by the way most work for women because they know they will win), she will always be made to look like the woman scorned in court. Her lawyer will rake you over the coals even if you are the injured party. And if you think it's over after the day in court, think again because her lawyer will come up with more crap to take everything you have.
Another Observation
This is my fantasy. It can't happen but it's nice to dream.
#2 FOR WM1
hey, how about an epilog or at least something from the Mime, TK U MLJ LV NV
I liked this
but I wouldn't even let the cheating slut have a penny.
a bitch
i would have a need for reveng
Trust Funds
Seriously people, it's not hard to protect large sums of assets. A contract broken is a contract you don't have to pay. Why then should marriage (a contract) result in payment when broken?
It was a good flash story.
Dummy
If you were around all the time when did the slut have a chance to cheat? PS - Where can I get a copy of "The Handbook"?
Well rounded tirade of jilted husband.
Life has its moments, this is one nightmare that we all could afford to miss. This author artfully crafted this story with a wift of emotion sweeping to the core of the pain and emotion of a final confrontation of his soon to be ex-wife. Lost love is beyond painful, and this story has captured it.
Covered all the bases.
Great speech/rant/tirade/whatever you want to call it. Works for me. No excuses. Zero Tolerance. Outstanding.
5 Stars.
Too close to home!!
This story was very close to real life. After having lived through a similar divorce.
I still ask, why do women do that crap!!!
Well it is not really a story but............
... it is a good little rant - you're right about the tirade part and a GREAT follow-on or companion piece would be that Slut Manual of Excuses
One teeny issue - and yes I know this is picky.
JD, while a fine beverage (I often enjoy it) is not Bourbon
WHAT EVER YOU ARE GOING TO DO
Do it quick fast and hard. TK U MLJ LV NV
Grim
Depressing.
The Best Part?
The best aspect of this tale is that we didn't have to hear the cheating cunt's explanation. We didn't have to hear her say anything. Fucking cunt.
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