by mstrb77
Virtually unreadable! Is English your second language? How about some, you know, commas, periods, and the other things that go into writing a story. Learn some basic structure and then read and re-read your story. Better luck next time!!
Yes... you need more details. but if you like sucking cocks and being ass-fucked like I do... it was great~~~
The premise of the story and content is alright but it lacks details and embellishment and your writing skills are dismal.
It kind of reminds me of those talent shows on TV, "What on earth led you to believe you could write?"
Really just another story about a guy finding out how good it is to su k cock and get fucked. I know becausd thag is what happened to me.