so, far this story is has been very well written, except i think that you are perhaps lacking in character development. for, instance i only know that Taryn is black girl because of the tags that are attached to the story, but you have not described her physical attributes, so i really didnt know that she was black.
Please continue on with the story. I really like how it's playing out so far. Cydney's one heck of a guy. He makes me wish there were more bold/confident -but-not-in-a-stupid/misogynistic-way men out there. I do have to echo a previous commenter in that a little bit more character development (for both main characters of course but especially) for Taryn would be great. Looking forward to reading more chapters from you.
Will she give in or not theys seemed made for each other, however the dream sequence give the reader a good idea to them in the future. Enjoyed the story.
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Anonymous11/14/10
Umm Yeah
I LOVE this series. It's awesome, I love the characters, the way that Cydney is so intense about his desire for a future with Tayrn is really sweet and hot at the same time... So yeah, describe them (especially her) more in the next installment please. Thanks.
English
*****
Nice.
loved it
more please ;)
love this story :) cant wait til the next chapter **lilmami07**
love this story
Thanks for the stories. I love this one. It's interesting and it just sucks me in. :)
Looool
I really like this one :D
whens the next chapter coming??
When?
Got damn is he ever going to fuck her?
Thank you
Thank you for the update, I was missing this story.
Cydney as hanging on by a wing and a prayer,
he so wants Taryn.
Update again soon
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so, far this story is has been very well written, except i think that you are perhaps lacking in character development. for, instance i only know that Taryn is black girl because of the tags that are attached to the story, but you have not described her physical attributes, so i really didnt know that she was black.
Please don't end things here!
Please continue on with the story. I really like how it's playing out so far. Cydney's one heck of a guy. He makes me wish there were more bold/confident -but-not-in-a-stupid/misogynistic-way men out there. I do have to echo a previous commenter in that a little bit more character development (for both main characters of course but especially) for Taryn would be great. Looking forward to reading more chapters from you.
Really good
Will she give in or not theys seemed made for each other, however the dream sequence give the reader a good idea to them in the future. Enjoyed the story.
Umm Yeah
I LOVE this series. It's awesome, I love the characters, the way that Cydney is so intense about his desire for a future with Tayrn is really sweet and hot at the same time... So yeah, describe them (especially her) more in the next installment please. Thanks.
i'm hooked!
I could actually see this happening... wonderful dream in real time... someone wanting to love someone who probably dosen't believe in true love....
Wonderful
wonderful... :)
i want more pleaseeee....
Cutest thing!
He's reminding me of the cute, sweet, amazing Darren Criss!!!
Very good story.
You write dialogue very well. NOT CHEESY. Excellent flow. It's so good I plan on reading all of it in one go.
Cute...irresitably cute
Lots of fun and a cute story line. Adorable!!! Love the freshness
in this tale.
Omg
I'm smiling like crazy this chapter was so good, but on the real I wish dreams did come true, at least some anyway... Keep up the great writing up:)
Her brothers are so crazy and ughh I love cydney
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