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editor needed
The whole story in bold text is bad form/style and should be redone to use standard text, and only bold for important places.
D-
Bold print for a story deserving small print. Like dozens of others and lacking in merit, plus it was poorly written and edited (if it was edited at all).
It was terrible
Poorly written and very unbeliveable, only thing missing was talking about the 9-12" cocks...but thank god you didn't, it was bad enough
Tripe
and dull, too. Please don't write any more, you just don't have enough command of basic composition and storytelling skills to do it well, find another hobby. No stars
Disagreement
Well I'm not as harsh as Anonymous, but this series wasn't that good.
You do have one reason the forget Anonymous comments, he/she wont create a user name to stand behind.
Tripe
Bringing in the three jerks from the garage into the story ended it for me. Some people don't have any taste at all.
The old fart
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