The Breaking of Allison Ch. 01

Superb

What a story. I love it, the author is not a fave of mine, hope this story gets expanded in many chapters. And that the author does more like this. Thanks

YEAH!!!

Absolutely Loved this.....

very nice

love the premise, keep writing...

loved it more please

Watchale las chichis, cabron!

Read, read, read...

Ouch! Damn!

Read, read, read....

Motherfucker!

Mmm, yeah, big dicks are good...

Oy!

Ready to turn the page...where's the next fucking page...?

Oh, I hate you.

:-P

you were right

Damn... you were right, I do like it.

Thanks LC

Very very hot!

Delightfully wicked

lied

You have a tendency to use "lied" in the wrong context. Lied means someone has told an untruth. You should be using either "lay" or "laid" to describe someone who is in a reclining position.

Response to anon

Lied works if there is a direct object

Outstanding

I don't venture into this category often but I promised myself after reading SWB that I would read the rest of your stuff. What I really thought was outstanding was the introductory paragraphs describing Allison. It was great description, almost like watching a movie, and it hooked me into reading the rest. Good writing.

RE:Response to anon

No it doesn't

Until you actually know how to use the English language, don't comment on it's use

Is this the same Mark for Siblings With Benefits?

I must know. The description is the exact same. The tattoos, the build, the eye color, his profession, even the bedroom. Was this intended to be the same person? Or was it coincidence? I read this first and loved it so tried out the SWB series. Super curious please let me know.