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OK
Interesting, but the chapters are so short that you just start getting into the story and it ends. Thats ok once in awhile to keep readers interested, but it does tend to wear on me.
i agree
This is a very good story but it the short chapters r mean I just get blind to it and its over but I want more Mechmanas
agreed!
The story is great. But I have to agree that the chapters are rather short. It may well be that you have already written the entire story. If so, perhaps you could post two chapters each day (or every other day), so that the readers don't find themselves wondering where is Page 2.
Just a thought.
Now that he has 'two wives' ...
... SEX SOON??
Diggin the Story
Nice close on this chapter it was a hoot and put a smile on my face.
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