Doc Ch. 07

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this is a great story but each chapter is very short

Great Read

I am really enjoying this story. Keep up the excellent work & don't stop the story any time soon. Thanx

Keep going...

.still waiting for the sex.

Doc Ch. 07

Dear Sir,
This chapter is a "HOOT", why because of the two young BUFFALO killed!! The Old Bull weighs in at 2000 pounds, the young buffalo weugh in at 1,600 to 1,800 pouns a piece. A horse Travois can carry tops may be 400 to 500 pounds, yet you stated they loaded two young buffalo weighing in at close to 3,200 to 3,400 pounds and loaded it on the horse travois, no way!!! Other than that you write a good story!!

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Just so you know I skipped the whole vision thing I read it the first time and from what I remember it was corny and made you the author seem like a dork that and the whole little one thing there around the same freaking age even though there small saying that to someone your equal mentally or age wise makes it an insult as your seems to be looking down on said persons also the whole sweetheart from out if nowhere is such a been move explain his feelings give detail enter his mind and put it on paper

In contrast to the other commenter, I would like to say that I am enjoying your story. Sure there is room for improvement - so write more, improve and let people read what you've written. It's good and highly enjoyable.