All Comments on 'Wilmington Woman's Club Ch. 23'

by Paris Waterman

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panpipespanpipesalmost 14 years ago
Well written, really hot...

But the ending was a bit abrupt--all that buildup and then her orgasm is one sentence, and the point of view shifts from her subjective to external. It's a bit like literary coitus interruptus.

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