All Comments on 'Pool Payments Ch. 03'

Loved the 10$ theme.. this surely is one of your best works!!

~Gary

(garyandrewsbodyguard@yahoo.com)

Is there really a sugar-free Cool Whip? What's the point of that?

I love playing with whipped cream. ;)

Great start in these chapters. It will be interesting to see how you let this play out.

An interesting fantasy, hitting several buttons for me.

The idea of satisfying a harem of women provides novelty, certainty, significance, contribution, belonging, growth and altruism. The 6 main things from human needs psychology.

I noticed an odd edit needed (doubled word), and the leaving twice part an unusual but effective device that initially confused me.

Your words flow off the page and the storyline is fun and interesting. Keep writing.

the storyline was actually ok but i hate how all the stories are in seperate chapters. esspesially when their only on page. im dissapoted_ and thats why i rated

this story a 2. READ SAMSLAM.

"Of course that got me to thinking about Traci again, and wondering about what I was doing, and the sense of it all. I really should put an end to it. Someday."

No, "someday" is when you're going to get caught, and Traci's lawyers take you for the house and pool, not to mention child support for those kids you're not watching while they're in the pool.

Oh, well-- those fake boobs of Lisa's make it all worthwhile, right?

From what I understand there are no lawyers in this fantasy world. Just saying

lovin this series Tex!

great story,great series

And you keep it going at the same pace, great

Loving these stories!

Good job, thanks for sharing your work!