Life Sentence Ch. 01

This is

an exceptionally well written and interesting story. A sure 5, though not as arousing as 5's are usually. This story does demand further chapters, I think. I do hope you will provide a next chapter (soon!).

ILienBagby (bushy@ureach.com)

Promise

there is a lot of possibility here. Hope you can make the pieces all fit. Look forward to more

DESTRUCTION

I SEE THESE TWO DESTROTING THIS LITTLE WORLD AND SENDING A LOT OF "POWERFUL" MEN TO PLACES WHERE THE WEALTH THEY HAVE WILL NOT PROTECT THEM AND THEY WILL GET THE TREATMENT THEY TRUELLY DESERVE

Very well written.....I must have more!

wow

please please more of this well writen story

okay

Okay, I agree with the others, very well written, just ended too abruptly. Hope the next chapter comes soon.

and another thing

Does that idiot who SHOUTED his whole comment realize it was just a story, its not real life? HELLO!?

Great concept, promising start to an outsider-insider story...

...little to complain about, really, save the minor need for copyediting.

And yes, that idiot who was SHOUTING his/her/whatever's entire comment is sorely in need of something resembling a real-life perspective on things...

Please continue

This type story is long over due. If there are others dealing with the after effects I haven't seen them.

I like that your hero began it all on whim, which then causes him to take a stand. I like that you didn't romanticize her predicament by suggesting she's somehow enjoying it, or has forgotten her previous life. It's still erotic, slightly disturbing, yet promising.

I can't wait to see how he deals with the inevitable confrontation between the girl and his employer.

Great job.