He had a moment of insight watching her walk from the car to the house. Dan was a stalking horse. It wasn't about Dan but about letting her openly be a slut like Mary.
He understands that she has been fucking Dan and probably others just like Mary. He understands that her declaration in the car is a passel of lies. He understands that the marriage he thought he had was a sham. And all of a sudden he is okay with it? He likes her as a slut?
I don't see where his earlier character development supports this at all.
"I had made up my mind that I needed to know for sure that you were really mine and that I wasn't just second best."
"I started making a mental list of what I was going to have to do. Get a lawyer, find an apartment; I'd need sheets, towels and the like and I didn't want anything from our house that would remind me of Nan."
She is a cheat and a liar. She has confirmed that for him. And he is going from a faithful husband in a monogamous marriage to joining her in slutting around and eating cream pies? Sorry, JPB, that is a suspension of disbelief that is just too big for me to make.
those porn sites you see on the web where they show old swingers, and you get to see a bunch of disgusting oldies doing their thing? You know, the sites you troll through to find something sickening to send to your friends for a Friday funny? Well, that's exactly how I see JPB and his stories. This one is right up there! LOL! So funny.
Sorry JPB but this one is a heap of crap. Simply too unbelievable. While I enjoy most of your stories ( and there are lots of them) this one is condemned to the dunny.
Just plain OLD SCHOOL from JPB .... I always like it when there is a Nan in the title ! In fact of all your stories it was Nan's Boyfriends that I liked the most.
Good to see some old fashioned stuff now and again.
At the number of stories where the male main character is a closet homosexual. Or best bi-sexual trying to pretend he's not.
But I am just curious, why you write stories like this and then try to disguise them as MF stories with a fetish twist when it is clearly MF-by proxy-MM?
I mean when you write a story where one man likes "sucking" another man's "cum" out of a woman, but the only thing he's particular about is the container it comes in, that makes him gay plain and simple. Trying to call it anything else really insults the reader.
But then trying write it as if because the male lead also likes women makes him straight? I mean, so why are you trying to hide it?
I can't even lie, I started it, but ended up not being able to finish it because of this. You may be trying to explore the spectrum, but it would make more sense to have this either under fetish or gay, not LW.
A new low even for you,JPB. You can be so good at times, and then, something like this. Sad to say, this finally convinced me to skip your stories from now on. Thanks for the good ones, and even some great ones, but I'll have to take a pass on any other ones.
For once, I thought I was going to read a story where the wife divorces the man because she was trying to see if her husband would stand up for her, and fight for her while an old flame tried to make a move on her. Her speech in the car was perfect! For me? That's where the story ends... because after that, it becomes garbage.
the story Fails NOT because JPB caanot follow basic Rules of short stories
while eating another man's cum out of your so called wife's pussy may be disgusting to some... That is NOT why THIS story fails.
as a STORY this story fails for the same reason MOST JPB story fail.
The author sets up the husband's character actions and behavior in RESPONSE to what the wife IS or has done.
then he changes the husband TOTALLY with NO explanation of any kind...
For example:...........
"I'm sorry Nan, but after what I and everybody else here watched you do out on the dance floor and after what I saw out on the patio, no - I don't trust you. And I'll tell you this; if you don't do something drastic to permanently shut him down tonight, I'll never trust you again.
*-*-*
or this......................
"What's to fight about? You made your choice. It wasn't me. Life goes on."
"What do you mean it isn't you? I'm sitting here in the car with you and not riding off with him."
"You made your choice earlier in the evening when you went out of the house with him and were gone for almost an hour. Then you came rushing in and ran straight to the bathroom and he came in a few minutes later with cum stains on his fly. I may not be Dick Tracy, but even I could figure that one out.
*-*-*
or this..........
"After what happened tonight I don't see any future for us so I'm packing."
*-*-*
I swept everything off the bed and onto the floor and then I took what she was holding in her arms and tossed it on the pile. I pushed her back onto the bed and she said, "What are you doing?"
"I'm taking my sloppy seconds.".................
*-*-*
for the husband to suddenly assert he wants sloppy seconds and that he is OK if his Lying cheating sneaky back stabbing wife has sex with her OTHER boyfriends as long he comes home to her....
Where is it written that a wife can intentionally drag a husband along to a party where she intends to hook up with her old boyfriend; proceed to hook up with the old boyfriend, thus putting the husband in the position of fighting for her; get lectured to by the husband to make an open display that this is over or else; ignore that lecture and proceed to give all three openings to the boyfriend; and this is somehow hubby's fault? You're fucking kidding me, right?
Take away the fact that by the end we know she's been banging someone else for three years. Ignore that she's already been banging the boyfriend. Just start with the first page, and please try to explain why a husband should ever be put in the position of having to drag his wife off of another man in the presence of others. Hubby tried to keep her from going, then made clear the consequences. After Nan jerked off Dan on the patio, Rob made it clear she had better make a very public display that there was nothing there. In response, she goes outside and fucks him. And you're saying he should've gone over and beaten up the boyfriend? What is this, junior high school?
I agree with the others who were disappointed in this story for a very different reason: The beginning did not match the end. In the course of one evening, we have a normal husband find out his wife is cheating blatantly, and he goes from the marriage being over to being "Fuck yeah! Let's Swing!" All in a few hours.
Please, give me a break. There was nothing in the set up of the story to even give rise to this possible ending, which is what makes it so incredibly unbelievable. It's as if a different Rob suddenly appeared, particularly where he came to the realization of the string affairs. He wasn't willing to forgive her for jerking the asshole off, but now he's ready to eat someone else's creampie because she's been doing it for years without his knowledge? All in a matter of minutes?
Give me a fucking break!
by
07/07/10
Truly disgusting.
Dan and Nan should be staked out on an ant hill.
Most of the time I like your stories. This was by far the worst. Why would you write such pure unadulterated crap?
I have decided to not read anymore of JPB's stories.
This story uses good english and punctuation. That's the only commendale thing I can say about it. The story line is less than despicable. I keep hoping a good wriiter cn come up with a good story line but the last have been bad andthis is terrible. I'll miss you JPB but your stories are not worth the time it takes.
Again people hit the nail on the head. JPB, when he wants to, can write a good story, even a good cuckold story. The problem with 80 of his stuff is it lacks internal consistency. The character are not consistent, the storyline is not consistent. JBP can write when he wants to, but I often think he wants to give up quality for quantity and they both suffer.
I agree with fregen and others. JPB develops a character with a clear and strong personality and then has him act in complete contrast to his character. Why bother to develop the character? Further, it's just plain idiocy that a person would completely and happily change their views in this way. The problem with Nan is not that she is a slut. It is that she is a cheat and a dishonest. She doesn't respect Rob and has been screwing around on him for over 3 years with multiple partners. The party setup is beyond humiliating. She has all her old lovers there and goes off to fuck her old boyfriend. She says it's to test his reaction but, for Christ's sake, she could have done a million different things that would have been less hurtful. Why didn't she just set up a TV show where she fucked all her lovers so that Rob could watch that. This isn't being a slut. This is being cruel, vicious, and manipulative. It also clearly says that she will do whatever the fuck she wants without any regard for him. Matter of fact if it kicks him in the teeth at the same time that's good too. And that's OK with Rob? I cannot imagine it would be unless the person was a complete submissive that gets off on EXTREME humiliation. All this makes this story too stupid to be believed. This is a "marriage"? This is how you "love" someone? With this view why not write a story where Nan wakes up every morning and kicks Rob in the balls, then tells him she loves him and that she is his slut? And Rob smiles and licks her off because his busted balls don't work anymore.
It is like JPB wrote two different stories - one a beginning and the other an ending - and then put them together, the male changes from a man to a wimp in just a couple of sentences!! Can't see it happening that way in just a short ride home!!! Sorry JPB, no medal.
You will never win a prize for literature, but you sure can spin out a good story! I admire your skill. Keep up the good (?) work because we all enjoy it.
Have you considered writing a real story? Y'know, one that has chapters, plots, characterization, conflicts, kids, grandparents, wives and husbands who are not fucking around all the time --- just some of the time, etc., etc???
People know you can write, in fact, you can write better than likely 98 percent of the writers in Literotica... so writing is not your issue, our issue with you. The problem with you is, you just masturbate and that cause SOME people to want to masturbate with you, in public, and y'all just think that's some sort of a high art of some kind...
You spend so much time banging on the keyboard, all these years (you must have worn out a few keyboard writing short, 1-2 masturbatory nonsense for 15 year old virtual/fictional boys to masturbate with)... why don't you challenge yourself and try writing some, JUST SOME, stories for grown ups, too?
Not only was Rob's character at the end of the "story" totally at odds with his beliefs as developed at the beginning of the story, Nan's behavior makes no sense either. After all, she left her old boyfriend Dan because he gave her an STD, meaning he cheated on her, and she could not then marry him because he failed to remain exclusive even though they were to be married. Yet she feels her cheating over the past 3 years was just fine? How does she know that Rob does not have an STD? There are some where you don't have symptoms and the STD is only found by testing (HIV is an example). So without explanation, it is OK for Nan to screw around and break her vows, never mind putting her husband at risk, when it was so wrong of her prior betrothed that she cancelled her first wedding? The characters in this story make no sense whatsoever, and despite good punctuation and readability, I gave this story a zero due to the innate contradictions and ridiculous plot in this tale. Very disappointed indeed.
Ok, JPB is bissexual, but he should put most of his stories in FETISH category.
I feel incredible down how much he lets the male caracters being trashed/humiliated for everyone. She´s a lying 3 slut years!Wow...sex is only a minor issue here.
She has all ready been with Dan several times since he came back. She, every once in a while, dreamed she was fucking Dan instead of her husband for years. This was a case where Nan DID marry on the rebound. Besides all of that, I agree with 'fregen' entirely. On a side note a better ending wound have been, when he went out to the car and found her there she could have told him that she did not fuck him. It was only a test to see if he thought she had married on the rebound and to find out if he still loved her. It would have made several people in this column foam at the mouth wondering if shes lying or telling the truth. It would have made a more acceptable ending in that it didn't end with a with an UNBELIEVABLE story twist at the end.
Rob asked if she wanted him to rescue her. She says no. Then after the whole things is said and done, she bitches about him not coming to her rescue, and says that is why it happened the way it did. Come on. Pick a story line and stay with it.
I'm not touching this one with a forty foot barge pole
roflmao
Bloody hell Bob, you must be beside yourself with laughter.
I'm with Trite_reader here on this one sweetie, for a mindless wank story, this one ranks at the top. Unfortunately I was giggling so hard by the second page, I forgot all about diddling myself.
I have to admit that one way or another Bob, you do entertain the masses.
Rob should have gone to hospital, with a suspected fractured neck from that turn about.
Don't ask me if there was any commas or semi-colons transposed, I sux at that myself, but there was one or two of the paragraphs that were a tad long for the ol folk that wear glasses...slaps hand over mouth...wooops...where's that damn delete button thingy?
bats eyelashes...I'm still ya fan sweetie, no matter how suckful the ending to your stories
Yep - same dog shit as usual. JPB - we know you secretly relish the negative feedback.
So to feed your abnormal ego - we encourage you to join the ranks of wantswhiteboys and bonnietaylor as the typical pond scum. By the way, JPB - we noticed the "size 14 IQ" idiot even enjoys your garbage, sad. D&W
I was really getting into this story and I thought that for once you were going to have a husband stand up for his individual rights. Then you twist it round and he becomes yet another wimp to a slut wife. I was disappointed.
Your writing is well up to the mark but please let's have a real man for once.
I can't help but insert myself into your lead character here, can't say for 100% certain I would have acted the same way, but if I did, I have one character flaw about myself, it is a get even bug. I would have to somewhat impose on the wife to slow her activities until I somewhat caught up in numbers, call it partly an ego thing but I probably could not have gone forward as a collective group until I had quote caught up with Ted and the others, just me. I would not be a good johnny come lately and just go forward, without some kind of catch up plan. I did love the story and its twist and turns.
The characters at the end of the story do not match the rest of the story. So the ending required a downgrade plus fucking the ass always gets downgraded.
Is who are these fucking people. Open marriages are one thing when both agree, but she has a "boyfriend" she has been fucking for three years and he does not care????? Get real please. When she told him about Ted, he should have told her to start packing again.
Bob, you do have some good stories. I had hopes for this one but once again, you let me down.
These are not people. Have you ever heard of how Stephen King gets the ideas for is books? They come from his imagination, his subconscious mind. JPB may get smidgens of ideas from others but it is HIS mind, HIS experience, His want /need that bring the stories out.
how many std's did she almost give him. been feeding him other guys cum too. this bitch needs to get some serious punishment and the dudes, they get to disappear one at a time over the next year or so. i am talking major and lasting pain, long lasting pain. but hey that is just me, cucks may like it. after all look what i did in they deserve to be punished - but i tend to go overboard but at least i do something.
The Lessor Twist Vector Taken ( a missed opportunity ) !
Well JPB satisfied his core demographic on this one ( himself ) but that's about it. This one had me engaged for most of the story but lost me at. about the same point everyone else jumped off the bandwagon. People were looking for spicy retort in terms of action for the wife's effontry at Mary's party.
The revalation that Mary was concealing a letch for the narrator was pretty good but there was no followup on that potential dynamic plot thread. Then his aquesiance to her declared intention of being a wife/slut felched any hope this story would transcend stroke fodder.
Can't really complain about the price of JPB admission , I'll just mosey over to his story page and find a tale where he was just a bit more ambitious. This wad one of his lesser efforts. True that. But still markedly better then the Loving Wives median.
Never again will I read one of your so called stories...
If there's anything I hate it's being bushwhacked at the end of a story. A tag saying cuckold would have been nice. You get one star from me; my only regret is that I can't give this story a minus rating...never again.
In a heart beat the husband turns into the biggest, wimp, cuckold husband of all time? Three years and he had no clue? Is this REALLY a JPB story or has an imposter snuck in and written this story for him? The ONLY possible ending is divorcing her. Some how, some way, he needs some serious revenge on the soon-to-be ex-wife, Dan, Mary, Ted and any other man his wife has been fucking.
This story made me run to the bathroom and puke.
English
Started well, but...
...it quickly turned into a steaming pile of dog crap!
A Moment of Insight
He had a moment of insight watching her walk from the car to the house. Dan was a stalking horse. It wasn't about Dan but about letting her openly be a slut like Mary.
He understands that she has been fucking Dan and probably others just like Mary. He understands that her declaration in the car is a passel of lies. He understands that the marriage he thought he had was a sham. And all of a sudden he is okay with it? He likes her as a slut?
I don't see where his earlier character development supports this at all.
"I had made up my mind that I needed to know for sure that you were really mine and that I wasn't just second best."
"I started making a mental list of what I was going to have to do. Get a lawyer, find an apartment; I'd need sheets, towels and the like and I didn't want anything from our house that would remind me of Nan."
She is a cheat and a liar. She has confirmed that for him. And he is going from a faithful husband in a monogamous marriage to joining her in slutting around and eating cream pies? Sorry, JPB, that is a suspension of disbelief that is just too big for me to make.
Thanks for sharing.
Hey, you know
those porn sites you see on the web where they show old swingers, and you get to see a bunch of disgusting oldies doing their thing? You know, the sites you troll through to find something sickening to send to your friends for a Friday funny? Well, that's exactly how I see JPB and his stories. This one is right up there! LOL! So funny.
This one stinks
Sorry JPB but this one is a heap of crap. Simply too unbelievable. While I enjoy most of your stories ( and there are lots of them) this one is condemned to the dunny.
Now that was a blast from the past !
Just plain OLD SCHOOL from JPB .... I always like it when there is a Nan in the title ! In fact of all your stories it was Nan's Boyfriends that I liked the most.
Good to see some old fashioned stuff now and again.
Less than 0
Less than 0!
I guess I'm no longer suprised....
At the number of stories where the male main character is a closet homosexual. Or best bi-sexual trying to pretend he's not.
But I am just curious, why you write stories like this and then try to disguise them as MF stories with a fetish twist when it is clearly MF-by proxy-MM?
I mean when you write a story where one man likes "sucking" another man's "cum" out of a woman, but the only thing he's particular about is the container it comes in, that makes him gay plain and simple. Trying to call it anything else really insults the reader.
But then trying write it as if because the male lead also likes women makes him straight? I mean, so why are you trying to hide it?
I can't even lie, I started it, but ended up not being able to finish it because of this. You may be trying to explore the spectrum, but it would make more sense to have this either under fetish or gay, not LW.
So in the end I guess I was just curious why?
-Risq
disgusting story
A new low even for you,JPB. You can be so good at times, and then, something like this. Sad to say, this finally convinced me to skip your stories from now on. Thanks for the good ones, and even some great ones, but I'll have to take a pass on any other ones.
Disappointed
For once, I thought I was going to read a story where the wife divorces the man because she was trying to see if her husband would stand up for her, and fight for her while an old flame tried to make a move on her. Her speech in the car was perfect! For me? That's where the story ends... because after that, it becomes garbage.
the story Fails NOT because JPB caanot follow basic Rules of short stories
while eating another man's cum out of your so called wife's pussy may be disgusting to some... That is NOT why THIS story fails.
as a STORY this story fails for the same reason MOST JPB story fail.
The author sets up the husband's character actions and behavior in RESPONSE to what the wife IS or has done.
then he changes the husband TOTALLY with NO explanation of any kind...
For example:...........
"I'm sorry Nan, but after what I and everybody else here watched you do out on the dance floor and after what I saw out on the patio, no - I don't trust you. And I'll tell you this; if you don't do something drastic to permanently shut him down tonight, I'll never trust you again.
*-*-*
or this......................
"What's to fight about? You made your choice. It wasn't me. Life goes on."
"What do you mean it isn't you? I'm sitting here in the car with you and not riding off with him."
"You made your choice earlier in the evening when you went out of the house with him and were gone for almost an hour. Then you came rushing in and ran straight to the bathroom and he came in a few minutes later with cum stains on his fly. I may not be Dick Tracy, but even I could figure that one out.
*-*-*
or this..........
"After what happened tonight I don't see any future for us so I'm packing."
*-*-*
I swept everything off the bed and onto the floor and then I took what she was holding in her arms and tossed it on the pile. I pushed her back onto the bed and she said, "What are you doing?"
"I'm taking my sloppy seconds.".................
*-*-*
for the husband to suddenly assert he wants sloppy seconds and that he is OK if his Lying cheating sneaky back stabbing wife has sex with her OTHER boyfriends as long he comes home to her....
makes no sense. None. the SEX is irrevlant
This is Just BAD storytelling .
Azpiri, You've Missed the Point.
Where is it written that a wife can intentionally drag a husband along to a party where she intends to hook up with her old boyfriend; proceed to hook up with the old boyfriend, thus putting the husband in the position of fighting for her; get lectured to by the husband to make an open display that this is over or else; ignore that lecture and proceed to give all three openings to the boyfriend; and this is somehow hubby's fault? You're fucking kidding me, right?
Take away the fact that by the end we know she's been banging someone else for three years. Ignore that she's already been banging the boyfriend. Just start with the first page, and please try to explain why a husband should ever be put in the position of having to drag his wife off of another man in the presence of others. Hubby tried to keep her from going, then made clear the consequences. After Nan jerked off Dan on the patio, Rob made it clear she had better make a very public display that there was nothing there. In response, she goes outside and fucks him. And you're saying he should've gone over and beaten up the boyfriend? What is this, junior high school?
I agree with the others who were disappointed in this story for a very different reason: The beginning did not match the end. In the course of one evening, we have a normal husband find out his wife is cheating blatantly, and he goes from the marriage being over to being "Fuck yeah! Let's Swing!" All in a few hours.
Please, give me a break. There was nothing in the set up of the story to even give rise to this possible ending, which is what makes it so incredibly unbelievable. It's as if a different Rob suddenly appeared, particularly where he came to the realization of the string affairs. He wasn't willing to forgive her for jerking the asshole off, but now he's ready to eat someone else's creampie because she's been doing it for years without his knowledge? All in a matter of minutes?
Give me a fucking break!
Truly disgusting.
Dan and Nan should be staked out on an ant hill.
Most of the time I like your stories. This was by far the worst. Why would you write such pure unadulterated crap?
I have decided to not read anymore of JPB's stories.
This story uses good english and punctuation. That's the only commendale thing I can say about it. The story line is less than despicable. I keep hoping a good wriiter cn come up with a good story line but the last have been bad andthis is terrible. I'll miss you JPB but your stories are not worth the time it takes.
that's right...inconsistency!
Again people hit the nail on the head. JPB, when he wants to, can write a good story, even a good cuckold story. The problem with 80 of his stuff is it lacks internal consistency. The character are not consistent, the storyline is not consistent. JBP can write when he wants to, but I often think he wants to give up quality for quantity and they both suffer.
regards
C
Damn! somewhere in the middle of this story he lost his balls
I thought for sure he would man-up and tell his slut wife to take a hike, but he caved in to a cuckold.
What a shame the storyline had to turn to crap.
Just Plain Awful
I agree with fregen and others. JPB develops a character with a clear and strong personality and then has him act in complete contrast to his character. Why bother to develop the character? Further, it's just plain idiocy that a person would completely and happily change their views in this way. The problem with Nan is not that she is a slut. It is that she is a cheat and a dishonest. She doesn't respect Rob and has been screwing around on him for over 3 years with multiple partners. The party setup is beyond humiliating. She has all her old lovers there and goes off to fuck her old boyfriend. She says it's to test his reaction but, for Christ's sake, she could have done a million different things that would have been less hurtful. Why didn't she just set up a TV show where she fucked all her lovers so that Rob could watch that. This isn't being a slut. This is being cruel, vicious, and manipulative. It also clearly says that she will do whatever the fuck she wants without any regard for him. Matter of fact if it kicks him in the teeth at the same time that's good too. And that's OK with Rob? I cannot imagine it would be unless the person was a complete submissive that gets off on EXTREME humiliation. All this makes this story too stupid to be believed. This is a "marriage"? This is how you "love" someone? With this view why not write a story where Nan wakes up every morning and kicks Rob in the balls, then tells him she loves him and that she is his slut? And Rob smiles and licks her off because his busted balls don't work anymore.
Garbage
You hit a new all time low with this shit.
Seems like most of the commenters got all the issues out
No internal consistency = no story, no matter what it is about.
Two Stories or what?
It is like JPB wrote two different stories - one a beginning and the other an ending - and then put them together, the male changes from a man to a wimp in just a couple of sentences!! Can't see it happening that way in just a short ride home!!! Sorry JPB, no medal.
CCH
Amazing
You will never win a prize for literature, but you sure can spin out a good story! I admire your skill. Keep up the good (?) work because we all enjoy it.
Hey, Bob
Have you considered writing a real story? Y'know, one that has chapters, plots, characterization, conflicts, kids, grandparents, wives and husbands who are not fucking around all the time --- just some of the time, etc., etc???
People know you can write, in fact, you can write better than likely 98 percent of the writers in Literotica... so writing is not your issue, our issue with you. The problem with you is, you just masturbate and that cause SOME people to want to masturbate with you, in public, and y'all just think that's some sort of a high art of some kind...
You spend so much time banging on the keyboard, all these years (you must have worn out a few keyboard writing short, 1-2 masturbatory nonsense for 15 year old virtual/fictional boys to masturbate with)... why don't you challenge yourself and try writing some, JUST SOME, stories for grown ups, too?
Agree with Rehnquist, Jasonnh, and others
Not only was Rob's character at the end of the "story" totally at odds with his beliefs as developed at the beginning of the story, Nan's behavior makes no sense either. After all, she left her old boyfriend Dan because he gave her an STD, meaning he cheated on her, and she could not then marry him because he failed to remain exclusive even though they were to be married. Yet she feels her cheating over the past 3 years was just fine? How does she know that Rob does not have an STD? There are some where you don't have symptoms and the STD is only found by testing (HIV is an example). So without explanation, it is OK for Nan to screw around and break her vows, never mind putting her husband at risk, when it was so wrong of her prior betrothed that she cancelled her first wedding? The characters in this story make no sense whatsoever, and despite good punctuation and readability, I gave this story a zero due to the innate contradictions and ridiculous plot in this tale. Very disappointed indeed.
Almost gay plot...
Ok, JPB is bissexual, but he should put most of his stories in FETISH category.
I feel incredible down how much he lets the male caracters being trashed/humiliated for everyone. She´s a lying 3 slut years!Wow...sex is only a minor issue here.
Another Chapter!!!!!!!!
Of BOB's!!!!!!!!!! SHIT. I do not know how you tie your tie. Keep them coming BOB somebody has to be responsible for the crap.
You Mean Nan's Continued Flame
She has all ready been with Dan several times since he came back. She, every once in a while, dreamed she was fucking Dan instead of her husband for years. This was a case where Nan DID marry on the rebound. Besides all of that, I agree with 'fregen' entirely. On a side note a better ending wound have been, when he went out to the car and found her there she could have told him that she did not fuck him. It was only a test to see if he thought she had married on the rebound and to find out if he still loved her. It would have made several people in this column foam at the mouth wondering if shes lying or telling the truth. It would have made a more acceptable ending in that it didn't end with a with an UNBELIEVABLE story twist at the end.
I've read this one
somewhere, by JPB or someone else. I thought there might have been a twist or new ending, but this one was deja vous.
A 1, and here's why.....
Rob asked if she wanted him to rescue her. She says no. Then after the whole things is said and done, she bitches about him not coming to her rescue, and says that is why it happened the way it did. Come on. Pick a story line and stay with it.
I still don't get it.......
Your worst!
X
I'm not touching this one with a forty foot barge pole
roflmao
Bloody hell Bob, you must be beside yourself with laughter.
I'm with Trite_reader here on this one sweetie, for a mindless wank story, this one ranks at the top. Unfortunately I was giggling so hard by the second page, I forgot all about diddling myself.
I have to admit that one way or another Bob, you do entertain the masses.
Rob should have gone to hospital, with a suspected fractured neck from that turn about.
Don't ask me if there was any commas or semi-colons transposed, I sux at that myself, but there was one or two of the paragraphs that were a tad long for the ol folk that wear glasses...slaps hand over mouth...wooops...where's that damn delete button thingy?
bats eyelashes...I'm still ya fan sweetie, no matter how suckful the ending to your stories
Amanda (ruggy)
Yep - same dog shit as usual. JPB - we know you secretly relish the negative feedback.
So to feed your abnormal ego - we encourage you to join the ranks of wantswhiteboys and bonnietaylor as the typical pond scum. By the way, JPB - we noticed the "size 14 IQ" idiot even enjoys your garbage, sad. D&W
sorry
but the plot on this one is ugh!!!
Up till then...
I was really getting into this story and I thought that for once you were going to have a husband stand up for his individual rights. Then you twist it round and he becomes yet another wimp to a slut wife. I was disappointed.
Your writing is well up to the mark but please let's have a real man for once.
LOVE IT
JPB you did great with this one.
I can't help but insert myself into your lead character here, can't say for 100% certain I would have acted the same way, but if I did, I have one character flaw about myself, it is a get even bug. I would have to somewhat impose on the wife to slow her activities until I somewhat caught up in numbers, call it partly an ego thing but I probably could not have gone forward as a collective group until I had quote caught up with Ted and the others, just me. I would not be a good johnny come lately and just go forward, without some kind of catch up plan. I did love the story and its twist and turns.
It is to bad,
that you do not give your husband characters a set of balls, I don't like your writing.
3 Stars
The characters at the end of the story do not match the rest of the story. So the ending required a downgrade plus fucking the ass always gets downgraded.
all were brain dead
Including me for reading JPB and expecting men to be men.
HE SHOULDNT HAVE STOPPED THE PACKING
now he is a known wimp,,,known cuck,,,,can he go lower. TK U MLJ LV NV
What I Wanna Know
Is who are these fucking people. Open marriages are one thing when both agree, but she has a "boyfriend" she has been fucking for three years and he does not care????? Get real please. When she told him about Ted, he should have told her to start packing again.
Bob, you do have some good stories. I had hopes for this one but once again, you let me down.
Crap
is the best way to describe this one.
To BetterEnding
These are not people. Have you ever heard of how Stephen King gets the ideas for is books? They come from his imagination, his subconscious mind. JPB may get smidgens of ideas from others but it is HIS mind, HIS experience, His want /need that bring the stories out.
Wow
I've never read such crap since I've been on this site. I'm very surprised and I daresay that this tale's ending needs a redux.
wow
how many std's did she almost give him. been feeding him other guys cum too. this bitch needs to get some serious punishment and the dudes, they get to disappear one at a time over the next year or so. i am talking major and lasting pain, long lasting pain. but hey that is just me, cucks may like it. after all look what i did in they deserve to be punished - but i tend to go overboard but at least i do something.
The Lessor Twist Vector Taken ( a missed opportunity ) !
Well JPB satisfied his core demographic on this one ( himself ) but that's about it. This one had me engaged for most of the story but lost me at. about the same point everyone else jumped off the bandwagon. People were looking for spicy retort in terms of action for the wife's effontry at Mary's party.
The revalation that Mary was concealing a letch for the narrator was pretty good but there was no followup on that potential dynamic plot thread. Then his aquesiance to her declared intention of being a wife/slut felched any hope this story would transcend stroke fodder.
Can't really complain about the price of JPB admission , I'll just mosey over to his story page and find a tale where he was just a bit more ambitious. This wad one of his lesser efforts. True that. But still markedly better then the Loving Wives median.
How in the fuck
does this story have a rating above one. You must get on under an assumed name and vote for yourself.
Never again will I read one of your so called stories...
If there's anything I hate it's being bushwhacked at the end of a story. A tag saying cuckold would have been nice. You get one star from me; my only regret is that I can't give this story a minus rating...never again.
#2 HIS FATE WAS PREDETERMINED
especially after the fiasco on the dance floor, All after that was superefalous. sic. TK U MLJ LV NV
I can tell you how semofuncpl3
look at the number of stories with willing cuckolds and you see why this rated above a 1.
No Way
This has got to be one of the worst
Is there a Minus One rating?
In a heart beat the husband turns into the biggest, wimp, cuckold husband of all time? Three years and he had no clue? Is this REALLY a JPB story or has an imposter snuck in and written this story for him? The ONLY possible ending is divorcing her. Some how, some way, he needs some serious revenge on the soon-to-be ex-wife, Dan, Mary, Ted and any other man his wife has been fucking.
This story made me run to the bathroom and puke.
Well, you've written a few great stories, some so-so stories and a whole lot of stinkers but...
... this one is certainly a strong candidate for your all-time worst.
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