You could really have a good story but you need an editor.
Your story has great promise. U should utilize the editors here ther are very kind.
it seems a little rushed to me, but I can't wait to see what it turns into
I am looking forward to reading more. Thanks
An editor will go a long way. They're really cool too.
This story does have potential. A proofreader can help too.
but we need more to keep us going...
Lots more please! Very interesting!
This tale is outstanding! Fast paced, and hot as hell. Please continue and get perv dad taken care of in a very violent manner!
GET AN EDITOR!!!!!!
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