All Comments on 'On The Beach'

WOW--This is the ultimate screw. A young boy screwing his own mothers pussy and then shooting his sperm in her womb. Playing with moms lacy bra and french kissing her. I think there is no better sex ever then screwing your own mother and to fill her pussy with your seed. Awesome!

This is a complete rip off of another story. Why do you even bother submitting a story that isn't yours. It's pathetic

Do you even have a clue how to use quotation marks?

If there is a similar - story then I haven't read it!

Some comments remind me of small minded teachers or accountants who take delight in finding a small spelling mistake, rather than the story itself. Actually some of you guys are rather pathetic - makes me wonder why I bothered.

Get a life!

Well, you have small minded drones who get mad when someone points out how the story was plagiarized. Then the mindless drones get mad when someone points out how there's a lack of quotations... which makes a story very hard to read.

You cheerleader drones need to go back to school. No wonder society is such a fucking mess.

Just thought I'd chip in with my two penny's worth. I read it though and had no trouble figuring out when some one was speaking. I actually didn't even notice a lack of quotation marks.

The story read well and I thought was quite tight, it had a pleasant level of tension which led to a very comfortable conclusion.

As for being a copy I for one have never seen a story similar. Ignore comments from anonymous critics there are always those who look for fault in everything they see instead of good.

Best guess the coast north of barmouth?

Pete

What makes me think that the author considered the situation surreal? Could it be that he uses the word FOUR times in a one-page story? Roget must be spinning in his grave/tomb/sepulchre/mausoleum/sarcophagus. . .

I did get confused a couple of times without quotation marks, but I was able read the story through and enjoy the offering.

Of course, the lack of quotation marks is barmy, but the story was fun. Maybe next time you can get somebody to go over the story for you.

I'd like to see this rewritten, but with perhaps double the length.

p.s. - The people complaining about the "drones" of the fault-pickers are equally if not more uninspired. These are the people whose own stories make no sense. Some of us strive for improvement.

I think it would have been more believable if in the storyline the mother is horny and hasn't had sex in a long time, and the thought of having sex in front of strangers would really be extremely exciting to her.

They could have seduced each other, him just wanting to fuck his mom, and mom just wanting fucked. Putting on a show should be secondary to them because they are starting a sexual relationship that will last for a long time.

Anyway, not too bad of a story.

Thanks

However... you may have used the word 'surreal' just a tad to much and I did manage to read the story effectively without 'quotation marks'... not always an easy thing to do. All in all, it's not a bad story and if you want to make it better, why not write a sequel (with quotation marks) with mom and her son being watched... say by a family member at home this time. After all, if I were in the son's positon or the mother's for that matter, would I want to stop once I got going? Keep the lust going hot and strong so to speak! It's up to you dear author, but if you want the votes this story has many fine possibilities for the imagination to work with.

This story had a wonderfully erotic element to it, and at the same time was not Verbose..!

I enjoyed it! Enough said!!

u need to use Quotation marks to make it an easier read

Now there's literacy for you. Cormac McCarthy hasn't used any 'quotes' in what I've read of him, and he's one of the top prizewinning contemporary US novelists.

Ignore the illiterate, and keep writing.

let the others join in

Hope to see a sequel soon.

Certainly it wouldn't likely happen in reality, and if it did, Mommy wouldn't give in to the incestuous exhibitionism quite so readily, but - who cares. It's destined to becum a classic in this genre.

Would have been much better with punctuation marks in the right places

we were on a family holiday mum and I went for a walk away from the rest the sea was calm I said if we had our costume we would go for a swim I was supprised when mum said we could go skinny dipping which we did we were alone until two men came in mum came close to me and cuddle me with her legs around my waist my hard cock entered her cunt we stayed like that for 15 mims until the men left all she said we can do this again if I don't tell any one

Hope you got your mom pregnant with your kid in her.

Mom with massive tits large nipples and real thick cunt hair.I hope your still fucking her.if that was my mom would be enjoying her every day pumping a lot of cum in her making sure she got pregnant and tell her to divorce her husband that you are her new husband.

Did find out she did get pregnant by her son had a boy. They still fuck each other and he gave her two more kids. She did divorce her husband plus she does gangbangs too and bareback let's every guy cum in her cunt ass and mouth.

When mother gives into her son. There is one thing she thinks about him fucking her. Most mothers dreams are to fuck their own son or sons. Older woman like younger guys because their cocks stay after getting fuck more than once. When mom tells their son don't cum in me their not on birth control. Well my mom toll me that I didn't care made sure I let go big load in her cunt and boy did she scream at me for cumming inside her cunt. She tried to move I locked my legs pushed hers even wider and went even deeper in her cunt where bottomed out. Pushed arms over her head told her my cock growing hard inside you. She said get off me and take it out and I said no because you belong to me now. Plus told her I want you to have my baby with me even told her we are going to have 3 kids together. Then I started fucking her hard bottoming out in her she kept saying feels like your coming out my mouth then she screamed real loud. She came real hard 3 times times and I cum in her real hard and she felt it. Told me now you made me pregnant even told me you better be fucking me every night. When she in front door she told me guess what I am pregnant but with your twins inside me. Walked up to her said that's good but now I want to fuck that thick cunt haired of yours and that asshole of yours too. Once I got her in bedroom she looked what is this and I said gangbang party. She said noway tried to move the guys stopped her and I said rip her clothes off out her on bed hold her down. Told the guys she is tours told her enjoy big black cocks. Each shoved up in her she screamd ripping me apart and I watched when she got dp 4 times. Once the guys finished she looked at me well are you happy that your mother got gang raped said yes that was my fantacy watching get gangbanged because I knew read your book there is even more fantacies you have until another time

particularly the 3 voyeurs wanking off on them at the end. not my "cup of tea"!

Never know what will catapult taboo deire. So well written in both mechanics and content.

I like indepth charactrer development. I lie to know their emotional and psychological makeup. Finally, I like plots that are logically developed. I can not see a mature mther giving in so easily to her son's advances without some underlying background.