The story was good, however the grammar and spelling were terrible. You need an editor. I suggest that you visit the volunteer editors on this site and contact one before mking anymore submissions. I gave you 2.5 stars due to the problems in this story. Please do not give up and keep writing.
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Anonymous07/11/10
DormDad: two AND A HALF stars ["2.5"] ?
How do you make the split? Vote twice using 2 different computers? Is there a trick to doing that using the stars that most don't know about?
TELL US how you did it!!
Does not voting mean voting a zero? Or can we vote a ".5"? Or how about "5.5" for REALLY good stuff!! Instead of 5 levels [1 thru 5] we can have 11 or 12 [0,.5,1,1.5,...,5.5]. Cool!
Why keep things simple when we can make it complex?
I'll keep mine simple [I know, I can hear "TOO LATE"]: VOTED '5'
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Anonymous07/15/10
A solid sex story
Don't listen to "Dormdad" he obviously thinks that the Americans have the monopoly on what is proper spelling and grammar.
The story was a simple sex story. It was well-written and arousing. There were no spelling or grammar mistakes according to British English rules.
I'd have liked to have read a more interesting set up though. It's an overly-used scenario (in my opinion). Still, it was a well-told story: quite erotic.
English
In major need of an editor
The story was good, however the grammar and spelling were terrible. You need an editor. I suggest that you visit the volunteer editors on this site and contact one before mking anymore submissions. I gave you 2.5 stars due to the problems in this story. Please do not give up and keep writing.
DormDad: two AND A HALF stars ["2.5"] ?
How do you make the split? Vote twice using 2 different computers? Is there a trick to doing that using the stars that most don't know about?
TELL US how you did it!!
Does not voting mean voting a zero? Or can we vote a ".5"? Or how about "5.5" for REALLY good stuff!! Instead of 5 levels [1 thru 5] we can have 11 or 12 [0,.5,1,1.5,...,5.5]. Cool!
Why keep things simple when we can make it complex?
I'll keep mine simple [I know, I can hear "TOO LATE"]: VOTED '5'
A solid sex story
Don't listen to "Dormdad" he obviously thinks that the Americans have the monopoly on what is proper spelling and grammar.
The story was a simple sex story. It was well-written and arousing. There were no spelling or grammar mistakes according to British English rules.
I'd have liked to have read a more interesting set up though. It's an overly-used scenario (in my opinion). Still, it was a well-told story: quite erotic.
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