All Comments on 'Foursome - Two Couples'

I hope you intend on writing many more stories. Very good start.

Yes it is good. One error in the last paragraph where Jason "then went back to the settee and sat down next to Jason."

You should have continued the lovemaking. It was rather abrupt on the ending, and there were a few errors that someone else has already mentioned. But not a bad idea. Take some time on the sex scenes, and you have plenty of story to continue here.

What hot story! Yes, maybe a correction or two, but out captured tye excitemnt and.pleasure of the experience. You shared a great story, thanks!

Looking forward to reading about more of your experiences.

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Great story but ended abruptly...maybe chapter two? Keep writing, it was great!

great writing, even if it was short and to the point. i certainly would have enjoyed it more with extra content and i agree more chapters are needed, bring us up to date with more writings. 4 stars