The story is written well and clearly has been properly mapped out and knows where it is going. The problem is it still too far fetched for my liking.
Surely no one is as stupid as Roberta going off to trace her friend without telling anybody. No she is too thick to be true ........ mind you i suppose that could be said of the 635 individuals who reside in the House of Commons?
Your right of course, it is far fetched, but the story isn't great literature but a triffling sex fantasy. Agree with your opinion on the house of commons too, for many reasons. Thanks for commenting storyteller07
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The story is written well and clearly has been properly mapped out and knows where it is going. The problem is it still too far fetched for my liking.
Surely no one is as stupid as Roberta going off to trace her friend without telling anybody. No she is too thick to be true ........ mind you i suppose that could be said of the 635 individuals who reside in the House of Commons?
Far fetched
Your right of course, it is far fetched, but the story isn't great literature but a triffling sex fantasy. Agree with your opinion on the house of commons too, for many reasons. Thanks for commenting storyteller07
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