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this story sucked Moose cock 3 years ago ( march 2008) when it was first published
it still does. 15 chapters of this shit
15
Look a little revenge is fine I suppose if you are into that sort of thing .
But this soooo over the top so pointless so extreme that halfway into the story the readers says... " enough already" where is the punchline..."?
Agree with Harry VA - just another cluck/wimp piece of dog shit.
Question - JPB, are you capable of doing anything other than your 99.1% wimp/cluck vs. skank whore submissions?
Boring, so un-realistic and predictable. Futhermore, your bullshit is rubbing off onto idiots like "size 14 IQ and the other cock-sucking want-to-be "mancelt".
All I see is a lot of trouble headed for both of them
Her revenge will get her a lot of grief in the end, and if he is as smooth with women that he could hook up with in a couple of hours at the beach, he won't have any trouble getting another woman.
She will be the one that has everything to lose with a whorish lifestyle.
Getting what he deserves?
OK, she's a dope. 5 times plans have been canceled because of her job. No way that is OK. BUT he's a moron for cheating on her. Once a guy cheats he deserves whatever happens to him. I make some allowances for a one time drunken screw up but after a calculated action like he took I really don't care what happens to him. Once she caught him on the beach the story was over as far as I'm concerned. It's my hangup, I know.
Revenge...
I've got to say i read all your stories and do like them. But i have to agree i thought this might of went a little differently since it seemed she just jumped with both feet. Strange, but i would of thought you'd have more detail for the husband cheating. OR is that going to be covered in part two? Well anyways, it reads well and flowed smoothly for me.
I wonder
I hope she finds out or that the husband wasn't really cheating. She starts a little break down, end up telling her husband a little of what she did and he gets mad leave. She can't get out of the sexual situations that she's in at work. hile the husband contemplate going back to her and she tries to stop what's happening and get back to him.
Just an idea, i don't want to read an entire story full of revenge. it's no problem if she said something like still loving who she's with cause if not...she can just leave
I have no idea what that well
known drongo (sorry erudite critic) is on about this being posted before but theres hardly enough in a page and a quarter to decide what is going on on. What I do hate are serialised stoires especially with short chapters. Not worth wasting time reading them to be honest. By the way Harry, why don't you write a story and show us how its done.
My bad.
The erudite drogo I refer to is of course Harry VA - gotta be impressed with his grasp of profantity.
bah
I read the whole series under the mistaken impression that it would get better. I wish I had my time back.
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