All Comments on 'Daddy's Little Virgin'

Not very good at all. Stick with a point of view and stay with instead of flopping back and forth.

Please continue with this story, I enjoyed how you went back & forth.

Started out good then you rushed it. 'Fist pounding'??? Super unsexy. Boo and hiss!

Good start however I found the story overall lacked depth abd body. Nice try, I hope you continue to write. Thanks.

Clean it up a bit, too fast from start to finish! Either add to this one or start another story, but by all means keep writing.

Way too short, way too blunt. No build up or exposition, an every unrealistic.

You're story lacked any reality to it, no build, and was written very poorly to be any good. So in all fairness make the stories you right longer with some more depth to the story and its characters; otherwise when you throw it out there it's like a tornado going ripping through everything in a second then it's over like nothing was there.

Por = Father in Thailand. I waited 2 weeks after I had my first period at 11 years old

Then I slipped into my Pors bed and rubbed his cock until it was hard then put it

into my pussy. I fucked him hard until I felt his sperm squirt deep inside me.

8 months later I showed him his new daughter. I hope when she gets to my age Por will make a baby in her too

Regards Waraporn x

I could list all the issues wrong with the story... I'll skip that though, at least the author had fun writing it. The biggest problem is that it seems to have obviously been written by an underage virgin. The writing style and lack of knowledge are dead giveaways.

Cum* please