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Talk about long and boring !

If you want to write a 800 page novel, try researching the subject first.

Then maybe you can write a novel.

Literotica is not an outlet for people wanting write long and boring novels along the lines of the drivel you just presented.

Loved it. Well written and a great story line. I couldn't stop reading it. Good job.

great story so far

hope you are planing on continuing this story line.

Mooooooooooooooore !

I really liked it, write more....dont need to be this long but moooore.

Definately Mooore

I loved the story so far and want to be able to follow along and find out what happens next
Rebekah

Lost me on the first page. If you write another story, please refrain from the obsessive use of "Dude" and "Freakin". It ruined the story before it really got started.

Ending.

I liked this a lot! It was kind of long but it did keep me interested to see what would happen next. I loved the plot and all the experiences that Amanda had. However, it could've been edited a little better. I found myself having to go back and read things again because it wasn't punctuated quite right and it didn't quite make sense. I really think that you should finish out the story at least until they finish their current college year!

Would so love to see

this continued through the end of college, though would prefer to see future episodes in 5 chapter chunks, though it works well when your reading it years after the original pub

Too wordy

I can tell, you didn't pass English class. I had to stop reading, it was way too difficult to read. It had a good premise, but also too monotonous. It had too much minutia scripting, that the reader would have a difficult time putting into context. Written correctly, this story would be half as long & more interesting to the reader. I would recommend that you take an English class & a writing class, to learn sentence structure. Just my opinion.

loved the story

Loved the story. Would like for you to wire more about Amanda future. I will agree it was long but well worth it. I have read it about 3 time and loved it every time. Thanks