I loved it! The sex was awesome and erotic, the characters were moving and real, and I found myself really rooting for them to get together in the end, and worried that they might not! Of course the happy ending was the icing on the cake. Great job!
In response to desietru (if I misspelled that, I apologize), I agree that your story started off with a bang or very fast...however you have accomplished what other writers who begin their stories similarly cannot seem to achieve. You have a good balance of meat within your story that doesn't make the story come to a swift end. If you should ever desire to write a novel, creating a slower build-up with the same amount of spice would accomplish this task for you. Do not stop writing......you do have a knack for it.
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Great sex, characters, and story.
I loved it! The sex was awesome and erotic, the characters were moving and real, and I found myself really rooting for them to get together in the end, and worried that they might not! Of course the happy ending was the icing on the cake. Great job!
Loved that ending!
Thanks for a totally hot little sibling love story.
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In response to desietru (if I misspelled that, I apologize), I agree that your story started off with a bang or very fast...however you have accomplished what other writers who begin their stories similarly cannot seem to achieve. You have a good balance of meat within your story that doesn't make the story come to a swift end. If you should ever desire to write a novel, creating a slower build-up with the same amount of spice would accomplish this task for you. Do not stop writing......you do have a knack for it.
Very sweet
Much better than the first story, because they were in love with each other, and showed it in this story.
I enjoyed the happy ending and how they couldn't except not being together, enough that they ran away to be together.
Thanks for the very good story.
kool
I like it ...I like how they stayed together that's love that's real hot true love..nice one
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