Fight Club

Yummy. Very nice.

Now thats the kind of rough housing I could get into.

good but

always use a good editor before posting to many goofs

Fucking great

Wonderful more of this please, especially the cunt lapping. I adore eating cunt vand getting drunk on cunt nectar

great

I love a good playful story, where people get carried away and go taboo! good story!!

Posting to many goofs is pretty much inevitable with Literotica's readership ;-)

Sweet

Brother/sister incest is more acceptable than father/daughter or mother/son as they have much more in common . This particular story was excellent except for the errors . Everyone can tell a story , few can tell them well .

To Anonymous:

Don't you mean TOO many errors? Glass houses, my friend.

I thought it was a great story idea and well written. Look forward to more...

I enjoyed it and the scattered errors didn't distract me at all.

Thanks for sharing a fun story.

Superbe

I love the combination of humour, true affection, and good sex. Please don't let the pedants get you down - write lots (and lots) more.

Good Story

Don't let anyone tell you otherwise that was a good story.
I didn't notice the errors as I was just reading the story and not trying to find something wrong with it like some people.
Great story.

Hot little story

It is a great little story and got me hard in a flash! Keep up the awesome work, hope to see more stories from you. I have added you to my favorite authors list!

inspired!

Loved the innocent play angle with this story. Very hot!

That's it?

Grammar needs some work. This story is too hot to end so quickly. This is one story which could have been at least two or three pages long. Even better yet several chapters long. With more explicit sexual content. This website is for hard corn porn, so don't be afraid to get more sexually explicit.

You changed tenses a few times and went from 3rd person to 1st person...

And it felt like it was a little too short