You could have made this into a 3 or 4 page hot story. But instead you cut it short. Shame on you
A hot little number is a great start to a day.
the last paragraph. It should have been a single sentence similar to "Hands down, it was the most awesome weekend of his college career."
I just wish we had more information the rest of the day.
Nice to hear about a young man willing to try things with a young woman for HER gratification instead of wham bam thank you ma'am!
Click here to leave your own comment on this submission! orBack to After the Party orMore submissions by julybear7.
[...]
Edit comment orSubmit Comment
Posting...
Comment posted successfully - click here to view it or write another.
Title of your comment:
Your public comment about After the Party:
Please type in the security codeYou may also listen to a recording of the characters.
Preview comment
Title your feedback:
Your feedback to julybear7:
If you would like a response, enter your email address in this box:
Send feedback
Sending...
Feedback sent successfully - click here to write another.
Username:
Password:Forgot your password?
Security code:
Your current user avatar, all sizes:
You have a new user avatar waiting for moderation.
Select new user avatar:
Upload and save Cancel
User avatar uploaded successfuly and waiting for moderation.
Close
English
More Details
You could have made this into a 3 or 4 page hot story. But instead you cut it short. Shame on you
Nice one.
A hot little number is a great start to a day.
Great short story, except...
the last paragraph. It should have been a single sentence similar to "Hands down, it was the most awesome weekend of his college career."
this little flash is a fun read
I just wish we had more information the rest of the day.
Nice!
Nice to hear about a young man willing to try things with a young woman for HER gratification instead of wham bam thank you ma'am!
Click here to leave your own comment on this submission! or
Back to After the Party or
More submissions by julybear7.