Just Give It a Try

Dude

Dude.....This was LAME.

Not bad

This wasn't bad. The premise was hilarious, and the conclusion a nice bit of irony. You could have used just a little more build-up (in my opinion). Keep up the good work! ^_^

Been Doing It For Years

Man, don't worry about what they say. I've been jacking off to my mom for many years and now that I'm married I also fantasize about my MIL too. And, to make it so much more exciting, sometimes I use them both as I wank off.

Good but too brief!

An excellent premise and I enjoyed the story, but wish it had been more developed. This has a lot of potential if you were to attempt a rewrite or a similar story!

like it, but

the sex part was to short.
what a shame, no titfuck with his moms great tits...

HOt

i liked it , is it real?
lots of this going on now for sure
waiting for more

I found this story could have been longer.

The story's title is quite apt and the premise is amusing, considering the ironic circumstances Derrick mannaged to create for himself despite the fact that it was his suggestion to Kyle. Perhaps that was your intent; nothing wrong with that. The sexual tryst between Kyle and his mother could have been longer, much more developed... certainly much longer than the overture which led up to their physical coupling.

The addressing of one character to the other by the use of 'dude' is redundant. I can understand Derrick's use of it because his attutude comes across as bombastic, whereas applying this attitude to Kyle is inessential. Something you may want to favour for some alternative form of address, next time.

Can I ask you something? Do you read your work before submitting it? If you do, can you not see that there are sentences where the word construction doesn't flow as it would when two actual people are speaking to one another in the real world. Do you ever notice this? Even more disastrous, what if people really spoke to that way? Literotica has provided a 'volunteer editor' section and there are actual writers who would welcome your need to get some of their assistance if you approach them well.

Suggestion: Using the above information, you could submit a rewritten version of this story. And consider this, if you get a half dozen people willing to comment on a story that could use improvement, consider how many well-earned comments you might receive for a very well written one?

Why in hell did he want to limit sex with his mother to twice a week?

Maybe twice a day and three times a day on the weekends. You can't wear out a pussy from fucking it, and a teenage boy has plenty of extra sex drive and full of cum.

A young guy like him wouldn't have any trouble at all fucking his mom twice a day and a girl friend once a day for years on end.

Thanks for the read.

Decent story.

But why the limit on the sex?

Hell at that age I would be trying to wear it out. Of course you never could.
But 3 or 4 times a day at this age wouldn't be a problem at all! Ha Ha!

Get an editor

Here's an example of why you need an editor - " grabbed her by the hair and pulled her to my lips as he gave her a good hard kiss."
There was just too much of this junk to be enjoyable to me. But obviously the wankers really enjoyed it despite all the spelling and grammar errors.

go ahead, Kyle, wear out your dick and your mother's twat!

This is a fine story of motherfucking by a truly gifted writer. But the commenter sexmate is 100% correct--no reason the boy should limit himself in fucking his mom! Once mother and son have broken through the stupid "taboo" that tries to keep a son's stiff dick away from his mother's wet twat, then they're totally liberated--free to enjoy the most wonderful feeling in the world, the cozy, comfy feeling of a boy's big prick filling his mommy's cunt to the brim. Sexmate is right--at his age Kyle's got to unload his hot young balls 3 or 4 times a day, and the perfect place for the boy to cream is up the same cunt he came out of. Kathy's comment is also important. Motherfucking is becoming more and more prevalent as boys discuss it among themselves, discover their buddies are into it, and figure they've got a perfect right to stick their prick up their own birth canal. I've got two college friends who do it all the time, they brag and joke about it, they laugh at the idea they should feel "guilty'--what shit! They're fucken proud! I haven't so far, but it'll happen very soon. I'm always hard around my mother and I make sure she sees it. I can see mom's real interested in what her boy's got jumping around in his pants! I know her twat's leaking 'cause I can smell it--the best smell in the world, your own mother's cunt--and it's leaking for what her boy's got hard between his legs! Don't worry, mom, you'll be getting plenty of it real soon.

LOVE IT

Reminds me of my wife fucking my son

Great

Amazing story. And there is a fact, most boys will consider screwing there mother...even if it means just basturbating to the thought of it or an image of her in some sort of skimpy outfit. Though I could walk around my mom with a hard-on, I do my best to hide it because I'm pretty sure she'd just try to embaress the crap out of me with some comment or joke...heck, I'm even a bit worried if she would tell anyone else. Sure I imagine her naked a few times every month, even tried setting up a confrontation once but failed since she wouldn't hop in the shower because she didn't want to kill a spider....but there is allways the nextime we go to a hotel room to get away from the annoying neighbors.

i wish i had a mom that was hot like seriously

Longer!

Yeah, you should have stretched it out a little more. Tease longer next time!

all boys are natural-born motherfuckers

This is a fabulous story by a terrific writer who's around 30 years old. Mr. R's heavily into tales of motherfucking, they excite him, make him hard--good for him! In "Just Give It a Try," Kyle's buddy Derrick truly says that the "taboo" nature of motherfucking makes it all the more exciting. Kyle's typical reaction is to suppress his interest by sarcastic remarks (this is a really funny, very well-done story!), but the idea creeps out while he's jerking his big teenage cock, and it's the best jerk-off Kyle's ever had! No surprise, 'cause all young guys are natural-born motherfuckers. Down deep their mother's cunt sets their young mind on fire and makes them harder than ever before! They know that between her legs mom's got the perfect place for their hard on. It's like mom's twat was made for her boy's stiff prick. The first time a boy fucks his mother he knows in a second that he's "come home," this is where his young dick belongs! Like one commenter said, it's no wonder that fucking mom is spreading so fast, all over the country. Mothers hunger to have their empty hole stuffed full and they know that their boy's got what it takes to stuff their hole REAL good! It's right there, between the boy's strong young legs, his masterful young dick. C'mon, it's only a mother letting her kid's prick up his own birth canal, like another commenter said, and who has a better right to shove his prick and unload his hot young balls up mom's cunt than her own kid? Honestly, it IS a very beautiful thing.

MOM'S

very good story but wish it had been more intense, maybe some anal, pussy eating, etc. As a teenager I began fucking my sister with a goal of making her into my whore. I knew at the time that mom was pretty much a slut since her divorce. I decided to make sure she caught my sis and I going at it. She did, and it worked. From that I provided cock for both of them for some time until sis got married. I continue to live with my mother and fuck her on a regular basis. When she sells her cunt to some guy and brings him home I suck his dick to get it hard for her.. I also bring guys home and provide head and ass to them while she's getting fucked by another of her tricks. It's great.

Haters gonna Hate

Ignore everyone who says you should have made it longer, or you shouldhave made it more extreme - it was well written, and was perfectly structured in terms of build-up and climax for its length. It's exactly what you set out to make; a quick, humorous, believable, well crafted piece of erotic fiction. It's a the prosaic counterpart of a fantastic quicky, just the way it is.

bravo!

great story!

Jockularities, jockularities

I laughted out loud a few times. Very cool!

I come back every once in a while...

to reread this excellent story of boy into mom fucking. Mr. R is 28 years old, has a very creative and dirty mind and likes to exercise it on the delightful subject of motherfucking. (He's also very generous--check out his list of Favorites.) I admire his hero Kyle, a big strong boy, who's enthralled by his own mother's mommy-hole and knows exactly what belongs in it--his own big stiff prick. His mom thinks the same thing, she loves what her manly kid's got swinging between his legs, and joyfully opens up her motherly cunt for her boy's fat thrusting prick and for what Kyle's got waiting for his mommy in his big loaded balls. Both mom and son know that the boy came out of that wonderful hairy hole between his mother's legs, and that that hole is the receptacle nature provides for all the warm creamy semen in her darling baby boy's hot young balls. It's the sweetest, most natural thing there is--a boy shooting a big twatful of his potent young sperm up the mommy-cunt he came out of.

Gave it a try

Good story. Loved the dialogue.

orgy

Have an orgy with your mom, your friend, your friend's mom, and yourself

Nice story!

I enjoyed the setup and the follow through. The one thing to watch out for is that you change pronouns a few times ("I" to "He" and back again). Did you start out as in third-person, then thought it better as first-person?. I started a story as yjird-person, but liked it better as first-person. Keep writing!