Way to go for a start, just too short...... time for Daddy to enjoy them!
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Anonymous08/09/10
Nice start...next time....
Next installment, switch parts and have the older sister show her pert little titties and the little sister show her picture perfect ass.... notch up the competition...we suspect Dad will eventually get them both, but let them compete, like they did this first episode, in front of each other and in steps... remember it's one thing to have Daddy get all hard and have to go jack off...it's entirely different for him to touch....maybe THAT can be chapter 3?? NOT too short at all...nice pace....
Cheers!
Being a writer myself I can really appreciate how you did this story. Competition was a very smart idea, though one thing i saw was that it moved to fast.
Again, it was a great story. Keep up the good work. -Aeonsun
You have just written another story PLEASE go back and finish the one about the sisters.
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Anonymous10/13/13
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Periods go inside the quotations. I can't believe you missed all of that.
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Anonymous12/05/13
Follow up
follow it up man, this is good
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Anonymous04/02/15
it's a lucky daddy who's got two baby girls
and their adorable little coochies to choose from. And it's two lucky daughters who've got their father's fat veiny daddy-dick to stuff and pound their cute little cunts.
English
Nice
Nice start. Let daddy take the girls individually a couple of times. Then the menage e trois. Thanks.
Nice beginning
Way to go for a start, just too short...... time for Daddy to enjoy them!
Nice start...next time....
Next installment, switch parts and have the older sister show her pert little titties and the little sister show her picture perfect ass.... notch up the competition...we suspect Dad will eventually get them both, but let them compete, like they did this first episode, in front of each other and in steps... remember it's one thing to have Daddy get all hard and have to go jack off...it's entirely different for him to touch....maybe THAT can be chapter 3?? NOT too short at all...nice pace....
Cheers!
Wow, great beginning
I love it, and look forward to the next chapters
Great Story
Can't wait to see who goe's next.
Great, really.
Being a writer myself I can really appreciate how you did this story. Competition was a very smart idea, though one thing i saw was that it moved to fast.
Again, it was a great story. Keep up the good work. -Aeonsun
bold
Let's get the next one out there
Waiting
Can't wait to see what happens next
Excellent
One of the better stories I have read on here
Wouldve been a good story
2 years and no update? Yet another author who had a great concept yet failed to finish what wouldve been a good story.
More Please
You have just written another story PLEASE go back and finish the one about the sisters.
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Periods go inside the quotations. I can't believe you missed all of that.
Follow up
follow it up man, this is good
it's a lucky daddy who's got two baby girls
and their adorable little coochies to choose from. And it's two lucky daughters who've got their father's fat veiny daddy-dick to stuff and pound their cute little cunts.
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