by julybear7
it feels like u dropped onto an easy ending. Surely she wouldnt forgive him as quik as that. How about an extended cut so we can see how they progress getting to know each other again?!?
Well written, but the premise is flawed.
Some good dialog, but his actions while away for two years do not ring true with how he feels. Why would he assume she is still waiting for him and gives a crap that he will get around to her. Are we to assume that his Mother has been telling him not to worry, that the girl next door sits and pines away while staring at his bedroom window? It is like she existed only for him and he knew it. There is simply a lot missing from the story to keep it from all coming together for me.
With no caveats, no complaints about the premise, the grammar, or punctuation... just a good read about a time in our lives when we are all incomplete, confused, and unreliable.