by Coarch
Your story would have been readable if you have taken the time out to check your grammar and spelling mistakes. It's too glaring to dismiss it. I can't continue to read it no matter how good the storyline was if the mistakes were so plentiful.
Lot of grammatical errors, but nothing that makes it unreadable. I highly recommend getting an editor, but am eagerly awaiting the next chapter.
Until you clean up the spelling and grammatical errors, it's too difficult to read.