Intriguing start, combining what seems to be a succubus story and an immortal. Throw in the fearful side of the protagonist and I look forward to seeing how it develops!
It's simple, too the point and great set up for what will hopefully be a successful story. The other thing I like is that you've laid the the basic rules for where, who and how things run in their Demon world. Well done!
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Intriguing start, combining what seems to be a succubus story and an immortal. Throw in the fearful side of the protagonist and I look forward to seeing how it develops!
I like it
It's simple, too the point and great set up for what will hopefully be a successful story. The other thing I like is that you've laid the the basic rules for where, who and how things run in their Demon world. Well done!
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