That was an interesting story but I think it would have been better if there was more background on what the deal was.
Short and sweet and well-written. Great work, Shobha.
And who was she to him? More lead up and detail needed. Story was written well, just lacking in details.
Thats the appeal yeah? less details entice and show daring.. leave it as it is.. and write some more.. !!
In a tale like this, we don't need backstory. We have our imaginations. Well, some of us do... Thank you
So much for emotions. I think reading the account took longer than the fuck. Too bad for both of them.
it's an erotic thing to be a pain in a womans ass hot story
Yeah, there's no backstory and it's just barely over the minimum word count. I kept this short to make sure things uploaded correctly. As for what the 'deal' was? I don't know; a MacGuffin perhaps.
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Interesting Story
That was an interesting story but I think it would have been better if there was more background on what the deal was.
Short and sweet and well-written. Great work, Shobha.
What was the deal?
And who was she to him?
More lead up and detail needed.
Story was written well, just lacking in details.
Thats the appeal yeah? less details entice and show daring.. leave it as it is.. and write some more.. !!
Perfect
In a tale like this, we don't need backstory. We have our imaginations. Well, some of us do...
Thank you
Wham-Bam-Where'd she go?
So much for emotions. I think reading the account took longer than the fuck. Too bad for both of them.
buggery
it's an erotic thing to be a pain in a womans ass hot story
Thanks for the responses!
Yeah, there's no backstory and it's just barely over the minimum word count. I kept this short to make sure things uploaded correctly. As for what the 'deal' was? I don't know; a MacGuffin perhaps.
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