All Comments on 'When a Door Closes Ch. 01'

Right category, kinda unconventional, well edited, liked it. But a real romance starts with more than alcohol clouded babble, it starts with getting to know you and appreciate you and your future challenge is to write about that...oh so much harder to do. This comment meant to encourage, not discourage, your future writings.

Great start you are a very good writer. Looking forward to the next chapters

Great start. Cant wait for more.

Awesome first submission!! I can't wait to read the next chapter! Hurry!! :)

looking forward to chapter 2

A good start. So far, a simplistic plot. I look forward to any surprises as to who he is or how he finds her. Your writing style is good. There aren't alot of mistakes. It is good for any writer to have someone read over their work before submitting, but many need it more than you do. I would consider putting her thoughts in a single quote or italicizing it so that it is more clear it is a thought and not being said out loud. Maybe getting a bit more descriptive with people and places could help. It draws the reader in more and helps them picture the story more easily. Good luck. Looking forward to a next chapter.

More please. I liked it

Its great. please do another chapter.