Very expressive with a lot of imagery and feeling. I especially loved the "fingers slipped into the ridges of softness that guarded the citadel deep within the cradle of her thighs"
However, one gives homage at an altar, not an alter. Watch word usage and don't just rely on spell check.
English
Good....
Not up to your usual standards...
I would love to be in her place...
Kathi
Good story, first of your's I've read
Very expressive with a lot of imagery and feeling. I especially loved the "fingers slipped into the ridges of softness that guarded the citadel deep within the cradle of her thighs"
However, one gives homage at an altar, not an alter. Watch word usage and don't just rely on spell check.
4*
This has feeling
This was written with feeling, it was so well put so sensual.
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