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Second Chapter
Hope its as good as the First.
too short
Nice build up but, too short.
a story
a story about two people nobody would want to have for friends.
A GREAT EROTIC WRITER IN THE MAKING
YOU ARE ALREADY ONE OF MY FAVORITES ON HERE. I wish you'd do slightly longer build ups and stop breaking up your stories, but you pick great scenarios and characters and I look forward to each new installment. You could have gone more in depth here with the husband, etc. But you are a very very strong writer with a great eye for tension. All you need is follow through.
No sympathetic figures in this story.
The only one not obviously cheating was the cuckolded husband. This was just not my kind of story...sorry.
Same old bullshit.
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Your are doing good.
You are a good writer. The story is believable. Ignore the negative comments. They are all jerks anyway.
Keep Writing!
Thanks for a good beginning of a great story. Hope to see more!
Fuck You, Liar.
style
why is it in all your storys you cum as soon as you stick it to them and they all love it ?
Nice Story
Why have'nt you picked it up with More chapters.
Great story .... BUT .......
Why aren't there more chapters? Although i would have like to see more details of their sexual experience, this was a very erotic story!!
Needs more chapters.
A project for F T D S ?
Agreed
Agree with Al. Calling FTDS.
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