Friends and Lovers

quick and hard

now maybe go back and show us the 10 years in between, cause with a combustion like that one , you know heat has been building the pressure for a long time

back story

This is a great start to base a nice story on. It needs the build up and more on the fear and anticipation of the seduction. And since you include his thoughts as well it would be appropriate to see some of his battle with his unrequited love. I see a nice short story building here.

It felt rushed, needed more back story.

Thanks for Reading!

This was my first foray into the Caufield brothers-- there's more backstory and continuing story on Madelyn and Ryder in SPEEDING, if you're interested.

I agree, a little rushed!

I would've loved a little back story, also. It would've shown the progression of the relationship between the characters a little better. But, still, very hot story! Loved it!

Perfect!

Not rushed. Short and simple. No complicated drama.

I loved it....buuuuttttt......

It was a bit quick for me. Mabey fine for others, but mabey there could have been a bit more back story? I know you're probably tired of hearing that. It was wonderful none the less, funny. Keep it up!

Short and sexy!

I loved this story! It was hot but not too drawn out. Great job!