All Comments on 'New Conquest Ch. 01'

This was a really decent start !!! I would love to see where this goes!

You've got an interesting beginnig here, with a nice touch of emotions. Can't wait to see what happens in chapter 2.

It's good i hope you continue but you have a few grammer mistakes a editer can fix that.

When commenting on somebody's grammatical mistakes - make sure you have none in your own comments!

It's GRAMMAR - not grammer and

it's EDITOR - not editer

*Will12377* your story is fine, thanks for sharing it with us. Hopefully, you would give us next Ch. soon

Please write more its a wounderfyl story and i wanna know where it goes from here