Too Nice

very good work here

I enjoyed every word. You have a lovely way of ending your poems. and hey, there's nothing wrong with being too nice, money isn't everything and girls who think that way usually become bitter old crones.

keep writing!!

~ j

Lovely!

Her loss!!

frdayam

You did a good en. Bittersweet as always, and like Norma Jean said you nail the ending. Good work and lemme know when you post others.

A teacher of mine once told me "The mind needs closure boy WRITE WITH SOME FUCKING PUNCTUATION!"

Commas make mental pauses! Use them and periods to end each line!

Mind you, I'm only complaining because this is the internet and I come on here to bash people. I liked it. To bad lit don't attach songs to pages you could play "Gold Digger" in the background :)

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I hope yankee dan finds his closure. (5)
this had me
two teenagers kissing in the birch trees on the birchen head,
and missed the sad irony of
love besmirched:

bemused