by Beatnic_jazzman
Everybody uses words to illustrate their stories, but Illustrated usually means pictures enclosed.
I really liked most of the story, especially the slow build up. Unfortunatly right as they got into bed, it just felt like you quit. At that point it just felt like you gave up on the story and wrote a two paragraph ending where you should have had at least two or three more pages of story. Dissapointing when you could have gone in so many fun directions. An erotic session while she body paints him, secretly watching the test subjects at the dildo factory, having her become a test subject, taking the body paint models into public for exibitionsim, or at least giving justice to their romantic endevors at the end of this story.
I think you have talent, but I think you gave up.
No illustrations. .?? The story developed very well. However, it ended abruptly. All that wonderful sexual tension building up to - they got into bed - the end. You need to put more into the ending, maybe another chapter. Thanks for writing.
LAST TIME I LOOKED IN THE DICTIONARY ILLUSTRATED MEANS WITH PICTURES. I MUST HAVE MISSED THEM IN THIS STORY. I DON'T KNOW HOW STORIES GET ON THE ILLUSTRATED SECTION WITHOUT ANY PICTURES. TOTAL SCAM.