Great story and I love it I do. I know you have to repeat bits (history repeating and all) but could you not have made this one longer to get more of the story in, therefore progressing. I know I'm greedy, but if you continue repeating bits it can get a tad grating and highly frustrating! You want people to READ your work not SKIM it which is basically what you can do after the first paragraph with this section. Anyway, I look forward to another installment, hopefully tomorrow!!!
Bronte Novice.
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ARGH!
Great story and I love it I do. I know you have to repeat bits (history repeating and all) but could you not have made this one longer to get more of the story in, therefore progressing. I know I'm greedy, but if you continue repeating bits it can get a tad grating and highly frustrating! You want people to READ your work not SKIM it which is basically what you can do after the first paragraph with this section. Anyway, I look forward to another installment, hopefully tomorrow!!!
Bronte Novice.
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