All Comments on 'McLain's Misfits Ch. 04'

there was some issue that im not sure with between the two paragraphs below there is nothing shows a seen chang or who was talking you went form Tom the bounty hunter in first person back to McLain in the first person with out so much as an indention. I found it a little confusing but did not think it took away form the story very much. Also you never actually said that Tom took the job just inferred to it which could get confusing latter on for readers Thank you for sharing and these my though on your work. Please keep writing thank you Mechmanas

Yes, that's about it. You will still be eligible to collect any and all bounties, plus you have the support of the Imperial Guard and the Galactic Marines. That includes supplying intelligence, support for you and your ship, and backup when needed."

We found out where the ambassador's daughter was being held from the captured pirates. She was on Wolf Three. We're just getting started on planning the upcoming mission, when Tom O'Connor walked into the room.

Kingkey, I love your stories. I would love it if you made the chapters longer. We have to wait for the next chapter, and having longer chapters would be so much more fun for the reader. I especially like that you dont have long drawn out sex scenes. The way you describe the sex is great. Knowing that it is happening is the main point anyway. Please keep up the good work, and keep writing. Make this story as long as you want but I do love reading it.