All Comments on 'Best Laid Plans'

Nice one DD. Keep the stories coming.

its more of a flash, but it works.

This characters way of handling this situation might be illeagel, But having said that this story line has been done to death by others and it was refreshing to see the different way this character handled it. Loved it, keep up the good work.

This was certainly original. So the husband already knew everything, and was very resolute in severing all ties with his family. He'll probably miss them after all's said and done, but they kinda deserved it. They're way too mercenary, ugh.

- Loving Wives and mean are incompatible

So nice to finally see a smart and clever man in these stories.

More like this please!

glad he wasnt a pussy

It's so easy to turn slimy people against each other. All you have to do is create some conflict and they will blame each other. His wife and kids all deserve each other's poor company. Although I think it would be pretty easy to backtrack to the legal office and prove that the papers she presented were fakes.

....with some retwisting???

Short and sweet is the name of his game!

Great read!!! "Thank You"

oh for fuck's sake what fucking crap.

wow, an idiot writer that lives in fantasy land and listen to the idiots that hate everybody lauding his silly story.

Normally, I am not an Anglophile about humour, but every once in a while a story comes along that properly tickles some fancy spot on my funny bone. This Best Laid Plan in some way reminds me of a story here about six month ago or thereabouts. It was called something on the order of Everyman Needs a Shed as in a place where he can escape from his wife. The laughs in this story are subtle and charming, I love it.

Short quick and a nice twist.

Keep it up.

A short, quick and to the point story. She expressed her formerly secret feelings of dislike for him, her desire to be with another and she was finished - right now.

Why invlove the kids, that was overkill for this story! You could have then spent some time talking, a little, about how she had treated him, his knowledge of her plans and his preparation to surprise her and - here's an idea...after she gets off the phone with lover, she answers the door and is served her divorce papers (adultery) and a sheriiff presents her with a restraining order from the premise and hubby along with immediate eviction notice. Gosh, a truck, two men and a woman are also there with boxes to help her move within the hour.

Maybe, you could do a chapter 2 or

Epilogue?

This is a good and very funny (in a way) story. You have to tell us about the divorce from his wife and hopefully the permanent separation of the two ingrates that call them selves his children...what slime.

Needs more attention to detail, can be remedied with another chapter. Or is this supposed to be one of those "Flash Story" pieces of crap. Please! Give up on this "Flash" story bullshit, it just makes you look like you were too lazy, or lacked the creativity to write a complete story.

Right to the Chase. I love the way Husband and Father got everyones Attention.

and made them Realise what Sorry Asses they were.

Another Chapter of how The Worm Turns would be Beneficial.

Love it when someone intends to drop a bomb and they step on a landmine on the way.<P>Beautiful

Nice twist - well done!

It would be interesting to know if he really deserved such a lack of love and compassion on the part of the two kids and his wife. Especially the idea that he would do something untoward, but then maybe he did??

Very enjoyable! Thanks!

It's just a clever vignette folks. Don't look for Poirot to figure it out. Just enjoy the little smile at the end.

Top marks Mr DD. The ending caught me, and I fell of my chairs laughing

Just about the stupidest thing I have ever read out here! No wait...

I think I'm getting hard!

Nope! Just gas.

Nice touch with the turn around but a truly empty and nonfulfilling storyb finish it off for us

Third time reading it still like it. Love the little twists. Keep up the great work.

Why those people don't commit themselves to the asylum???

Funny story. Ignore the anonymous twits.

Nice touch. She's gone and without her lover and the kids lost 1 parent. The divorce settlement will have a definite tip against her. The remaining parent has minimal value to them. Amazing what someone can do with a little information. I liked it.

I had a really good snicker at the end of this one. Thanks for the read. Jim

.....after being invested in a brilliant mind a soul searching loving wives story earlier....you've made my day....HELL!!! you've restored my love for twisted happy endings.....brilliant story mate....

But still good enough for 3***.

maybe not,but doubleDD made it possible and humurous. TK U MLJ LV NV

Loved it - Five Stars!

and never finished

What is left to finish? He is not reconciling and the three fools will be in conflict for some time. That is a resolution right there. If you want to know what happened between Bob's wife and her lover - who cares? The protagonist of this story was Bob and this chapter of his life is over at the end of the story - end of story!!

Introduction, problem resolution

There is nothing more that need be said. I don't need to read 5 pages of their fucking college relationship. Married, she wants out because she's a cheating woman, and he messes up her plan because of a PLAUSIBLE coincidence. It could happen, so I give the benefit of the doubt.

Nicely written and thank you

nice way to get rid of a fucked up family.

bill

Its always good to know where people stand at.

This was way too short. Great, but short. How about a sequel.

Fantastic story but way too short. I highly recommend this story for all the cucks out there to see how a real man responds. As always I am sad for giving it a 5 because that's the maximum I was allowed.

a bit of information is a wounderful thing....

Great flash story -- sad to think he could be married so long and not realize what kind of wife and children he had. Also, sad to think he could cut both his children out of his life so easily. Sad to all concerned.

Thanks for the offering.

I really like your BTB shorts!

You just keep rolling grenades into relationships. I like it!

Another great tale from DD! Short, sweet (revenge), and to the point!

5 Big Stars!

I love that one - it was fucking priceless -

A true Master Card moment -

You gotta know there will be shit flying at the attorney's office but tough shit - it is unlikely anyone will be caught and the husband wins it all - no one will believe the bitch did not plan it all or the new guy either way even the court will be pissed.

Short and sweet and to the point....of the dagger of vengeance!

Yah just gotta love good act of hate,

That's what you do to a cheating cunt wife and a selfish ungrateful family. DUMP 'EM.

Ha

Thank you DD who saves the honor of India alone!

Where is the follow up? I want them destroyed without mercy.

Where's the rest of it. Yes, it is a good flash story but how much better could it have been? I guess we'll never know. Still...as I said, it was a great flash story so it still get's 5*s from me.

Yet another writer that CAN'T finish what they start!

so I do hereby before the queen and subjects give 3 stars

ONLY BECAUSE YOU DIDN'T FINISHTHEDAMNSTORY!

A real excellent start of a story...BUT...I wanted MORE. Now I know how finishthedamnstory feels when you read a good story and it just stops.

These pauses in your tales betwee 2nd and 3rd gear are getting tiresome.

And after the lovers talk, they'll figure out you were responsible for the papers. And then the REAL fight begins, And she gets half of everything. Guess what? You may have won the first skirmish but boy are you about to get screwed in the divorce!

but there was so much more to tell and evidently you're just lazy and only told a small part of the story. Even a flash story deserves somewhat of an end. It could have been an easy 5*s. As it is, 2 is the best I can do.

without reading any of the other comments I would like to say there could have been a lot more said within this story. But you, like so many other wanna-be authors on this site, either don't have a way to enhance their stories just leave it like this one. This could have been good enough to earn 5 star rating. But due to you ( for whatever reason ) decided to leave it like it is. I wont even give it 3. A 11/2 to a 2 is all its worth. FINISH THE DAMN STORY either by adding another chapter or two and maybe it will get the 5 stars that it could or would get ( from me anyway ). Because from reading this story it appears that you have a talent for writing. You were doing good with this. so please add another chapter and basically finish this one.

if this scenario could happen more than once in a blue moon. TK U MLJ LV NV

great story

and it is! So short yet so fully packed. It got 5 well deserved stars from me but I can't help wishing there was a lot more.

it is funny how some people cut on writers here about their postings.

amazingly they do not have enough imagination to write their own, but they are qualified to bitch about someone else's work. does anyone else have any thoughts on that?

This was a laid plan for a story, but really it was just a scene.

Finish the fucking thing!!

It said what needed to be said.

Well done.

5* for a short with a fun twist!

Come on, you could do so much more with this story...I'll even edit it for you, might even offer a few suggestion and paths to take....😎

It is an unfinished LIFE story. No mention of his birthing, his first kiss,etc. Oh right, those were before this day. OK, there is no mention of stubbing his toe on the coffee table two weeks later, or the promotion he got six months later. Didn't even detail how he passed away quietly in his sleep thirty years later. It is, however, a complete story of a man out-smarting a treacherous family. And a clever tale at that!

If not exactly likely. TY

He told his story, he gets to say when it’s finished.

‘Nuff Said.

Makes me laugh. Writes about being lazy...take look at sinsational83's profile. Well if anyone knows about lazy ol sinsational83 would. Didn't fill in any field.

I took this story to have same structure as most DD works.

Breif, hardhitting, humorous and the signature ending twist.

I much prefer a work by O'Henry-than Dostoyevsky

Love how having friends in low places, can do the dirty to the bad guys.

good job

Another different, but familiar story.

Their outright treachery was exposed and all the bullshit was eliminated. Very well done. She'll soon be singing, "My boomerang won't come back".

⭐⭐⭐⭐⭐....⭐

Liked the story only 2 🌟 as no ending

I wasn't expecting too much once the kids showed their true colors, but the ending was delightful! It always helps to have friends.

Yes plans can get better. I hope he used the heads up to protect his business and remove the liquid assets from his wife's reach BEFORE he screwed with the divorce papers. Had he been really clever he would have changed the papers to give him everything, had her sign them without reading them and then signed them in front of her. THAT would have been clever.

Love those plans

Very nice and fast, kaboom.5 stars.

Who can pass on these short , concise, stories of delicious revenge.

Best laid plans, great little story with a happy ending.

HOORAH

Nice!

This was rather pointless.

Again, great story about a guy with friends in the right places.

Obviously, to annoy the shit out of you.

And for that, I give this quick, fun, BTB tale 5 stars.

Only an ignorant and truly stupid s.o.b. would have asked what you asked.

Great short story. Cut their balls off and leave them to bleed out.

Nice to the point story 5*

Just another incomplete flash story.

Good flash story, although the conversations sounded stilted.

no comment and 1 star

An incomplete poor end.....awful writing...1 star

This was a very clever idea. Very entertaining. Ignore the simian intellects who can't enjoy a flash.

Nice little 'gotcha!'

@nixrox: Posting a comment to say "no comment" shows a biting wit and an ironic sensibility that i can only envy, but never hope to equal.