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Best Laid Plans

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by Anonymous

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by Average_Writer09/20/10

Short but sweet.

Nice one DD. Keep the stories coming.

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by Anonymous09/20/10

Pretty good

its more of a flash, but it works.

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by Justtoold09/20/10

great

This characters way of handling this situation might be illeagel, But having said that this story line has been done to death by others and it was refreshing to see the different way this character handled it. Loved it, keep up the good work.

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by Mousse909/20/10

This was certainly original. So the husband already knew everything, and was very resolute in severing all ties with his family. He'll probably miss them after all's said and done, but they kinda deserved it. They're way too mercenary, ugh.

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by Anonymous09/20/10

just mean

- Loving Wives and mean are incompatible

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by Anonymous09/20/10

I loved it

So nice to finally see a smart and clever man in these stories.

More like this please!

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by Anonymous09/20/10

hoorah!

glad he wasnt a pussy

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by jasonnh09/20/10

Clever twist

It's so easy to turn slimy people against each other. All you have to do is create some conflict and they will blame each other. His wife and kids all deserve each other's poor company. Although I think it would be pretty easy to backtrack to the legal office and prove that the papers she presented were fakes.

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by Pistolpackinpete09/20/10

Is this a repost?....

....with some retwisting???

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by Harddaysknight09/20/10

DD is one wicked dude!

Short and sweet is the name of his game!

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by chytown09/20/10

Great Story!!!!!!!

Great read!!! "Thank You"

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by Anonymous09/20/10

What???

oh for fuck's sake what fucking crap.

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by Anonymous09/20/10

idiot

wow, an idiot writer that lives in fantasy land and listen to the idiots that hate everybody lauding his silly story.

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by BobNbobbi09/20/10

English sense of humour

Normally, I am not an Anglophile about humour, but every once in a while a story comes along that properly tickles some fancy spot on my funny bone. This Best Laid Plan in some way reminds me of a story here about six month ago or thereabouts. It was called something on the order of Everyman Needs a Shed as in a place where he can escape from his wife. The laughs in this story are subtle and charming, I love it.

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by deadone09/21/10

liked it

Short quick and a nice twist.
Keep it up.

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by Anonymous09/21/10

The Kids

A short, quick and to the point story. She expressed her formerly secret feelings of dislike for him, her desire to be with another and she was finished - right now.
Why invlove the kids, that was overkill for this story! You could have then spent some time talking, a little, about how she had treated him, his knowledge of her plans and his preparation to surprise her and - here's an idea...after she gets off the phone with lover, she answers the door and is served her divorce papers (adultery) and a sheriiff presents her with a restraining order from the premise and hubby along with immediate eviction notice. Gosh, a truck, two men and a woman are also there with boxes to help her move within the hour.
Maybe, you could do a chapter 2 or
Epilogue?

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by teh56809/21/10

Needs A Second Chapter

This is a good and very funny (in a way) story. You have to tell us about the divorce from his wife and hopefully the permanent separation of the two ingrates that call them selves his children...what slime.

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by zed009/21/10

Great Story, but a little too Short

Needs more attention to detail, can be remedied with another chapter. Or is this supposed to be one of those "Flash Story" pieces of crap. Please! Give up on this "Flash" story bullshit, it just makes you look like you were too lazy, or lacked the creativity to write a complete story.

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by C_frommn09/21/10

I Love It

Right to the Chase. I love the way Husband and Father got everyones Attention.
and made them Realise what Sorry Asses they were.
Another Chapter of how The Worm Turns would be Beneficial.

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by Anonymous09/21/10

Entertaining

Love it when someone intends to drop a bomb and they step on a landmine on the way.Beautiful

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by terrydavid09/21/10

Enjoyed it.

Nice twist - well done!

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by bruce2209/21/10

Nice Flash Story

It would be interesting to know if he really deserved such a lack of love and compassion on the part of the two kids and his wife. Especially the idea that he would do something untoward, but then maybe he did??

Very enjoyable! Thanks!

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by EspressoBolus09/22/10

Clever

It's just a clever vignette folks. Don't look for Poirot to figure it out. Just enjoy the little smile at the end.

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by Mandy0109/27/10

Short, and ever so sweet...lol

Top marks Mr DD. The ending caught me, and I fell of my chairs laughing

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by Anonymous10/19/10

Whatever!

Just about the stupidest thing I have ever read out here! No wait...

I think I'm getting hard!

Nope! Just gas.

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by RePhil10/19/10

Empty

Nice touch with the turn around but a truly empty and nonfulfilling storyb finish it off for us

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by deadone10/30/10

loved it

Third time reading it still like it. Love the little twists. Keep up the great work.

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by Anonymous11/23/10

Yet another mindless crap from illiterate idiot !!!

Why those people don't commit themselves to the asylum???

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by Anonymous12/23/10

Thanks

Funny story. Ignore the anonymous twits.

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by Anonymous01/27/11

nicely done

Nice touch. She's gone and without her lover and the kids lost 1 parent. The divorce settlement will have a definite tip against her. The remaining parent has minimal value to them. Amazing what someone can do with a little information. I liked it.

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by BILLYTHEGER02/25/11

yes i love it the stupid slut ,who needs family like that good riddance

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by jiminab03/22/11

Liked it

I had a really good snicker at the end of this one. Thanks for the read. Jim

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by kingspride05/13/11

DUDE STORY ROCKS!!!!

.....after being invested in a brilliant mind a soul searching loving wives story earlier....you've made my day....HELL!!! you've restored my love for twisted happy endings.....brilliant story mate....

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by DWornock09/01/11

too short and very improbable

But still good enough for 3***.

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by tazz31709/01/11

COULD IT HAPPEN

maybe not,but doubleDD made it possible and humurous. TK U MLJ LV NV

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by oldwayne09/16/11

Great!

Loved it - Five Stars!

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by Anonymous09/17/11

Yeah

and never finished

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by dangerouslydead10/16/11

Not Finished

What is left to finish? He is not reconciling and the three fools will be in conflict for some time. That is a resolution right there. If you want to know what happened between Bob's wife and her lover - who cares? The protagonist of this story was Bob and this chapter of his life is over at the end of the story - end of story!!

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by FD4512/26/11

It is a scene

Introduction, problem resolution

There is nothing more that need be said. I don't need to read 5 pages of their fucking college relationship. Married, she wants out because she's a cheating woman, and he messes up her plan because of a PLAUSIBLE coincidence. It could happen, so I give the benefit of the doubt.

Nicely written and thank you

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by Huedogg201/25/12

lol, this was great

nice way to get rid of a fucked up family.

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by Anonymous04/06/12

ilikethatstory

bill

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by Anonymous04/25/12

A very good short story......

Its always good to know where people stand at.

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by nakdsub08/07/12

Okay, I gave 5* but...

This was way too short. Great, but short. How about a sequel.

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by karan987612/08/12

Another masterpiece

Fantastic story but way too short. I highly recommend this story for all the cucks out there to see how a real man responds. As always I am sad for giving it a 5 because that's the maximum I was allowed.

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by Anonymous01/27/13

a bit of information is a wounderful thing....

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by Anonymous04/23/13

Flashing in public can be exciting

Great flash story -- sad to think he could be married so long and not realize what kind of wife and children he had. Also, sad to think he could cut both his children out of his life so easily. Sad to all concerned.

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by Drbeamer333304/23/13

Clever

Thanks for the offering.

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by BDEarth05/23/13

They keep getting better

I really like your BTB shorts!

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by Anonymous05/27/13

Another one

You just keep rolling grenades into relationships. I like it!

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by IronDragon08/22/13

DD Does it again!

Another great tale from DD! Short, sweet (revenge), and to the point!

5 Big Stars!

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