Great little story with a nice twist at the end!
nice and sweet.
at the end, well done
I read Emily's phone conversation and was about to read on but then noticed the lack of gender specific pronouns. Hmmmm. Clever girl.
Thanks for sharing.
Good story and clever foreshadowing without giving away the twist that tied back very well. Just one tiny point: did Emily have red hair or strawberry blond? There is a difference.
Your plots are fresh and well designed. Keep writing!
didn't need sex. It was well done, Good foreshadowing. This was really well done. Keep writing!
Best regards C
short, sweet, and original, with a nice twist. Very well done!
I love stories like this. Very well done. Sex scenes would have spoilt it.
Enjoyed the story! Thanks for sharing. Ohio, USA
Even though you are a new author, all of your stories are interesting and well written. Sex or no sex, your stories are definitely worth reading. Keep on writing.
Just right length. No real need for sex scenes in this one. Nice job.
Emily, girl, you didnt lose a moment. Great short story. a great guy is a rare find. and most are already taken.
An amazing tale constructed to perfection and with the sinister mind I admire! Thank you!
Great story ! I was not sure about it when I started reading , thinking it was going to be a typical married woman bar seduction story < but you proved me wrong , Good Job !!!!! keep the stories coming .
Superbly plotted and written!
you are rapidly becoming one of my favorite writers. This went off in a direction I did NOT see...
Although I had figured it out way before the end, it was still very funny to read, especially the reactions of the other girls. A funny short story, very nice.
I liked it a lot. I hope that Emily really does console MIke and help him feel better. Thanks for the story.
Great little story with a twist I did not see coming at all!
Enjoyed the twist
...as original as Scorpio,who tends to fawn these days said. And Harry didn't see this coming?
A delightful little twist and those other girls are already "also-rans" before they even knew the race had started. Well done.
Great little story, didn't see the end coming until it got there. No sex, so what!
Didn’t see the ending at all … love it!
I seen the ending coming, but it didn't making it any less funny. Nice story. And please, I'd really like to see a humorous sequel showing Vicky's reaction to Emily and Mike hooking up.
Suckered me right to the end! nice job
Much too short but the ending was surprising.
with the unexpected twist at the end. More about Emily and Mike please.
Thanks for your hard work.
teehee... snicker... snort... funny...
just goes to show friendship only goes so far.....
I'm now giggling
very entertaining. Thanks!
I had to read this again. Keep the stories coming. Thank you.
That's funny stuff right there!
Never saw that twist at the end. And the girls bailing out of the bar like a fire house just made me laugh. First in first served. Thanks for the laugh. Jim
More please, more more more.
Didn't see that twist coming. Hope you'll come with more stories.
Regards, J [drazvich(at)live(dot)com]
Please don't try to copy most everyone else on this site. Your stories are all the better for not having to slog through explicit scenes that don't really contribute to the plot. Leaving a place for the imagination is much more powerful than mere description. If all people want is graphic sex scenes, let them read in the erotic couplings section. Signed -Surreptitious
and hope its beneficial to all. TK U MLJ LV NV
The way the other Girls took so long to figure out their friend was Chasing the "Prize" lol.
Good twist-in-the-tail(tale) plot
What the fuck... What happened and where was I?
Clear as crystal to me well ahead of the ladies lol -
Perfect set up and one of them was going to Mike's that night no matter what - heh
A great story with the perfect realization at the end! Well written and strong premise.
I liked it muchly.
Funny and sad is this tale.
What we actually have here are the future cheating wives of America.
Thanks for the smile !
Funny, clever, remarkably true. Emily is a sly one. Positioning herself like that. Well done author!
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