All Comments on 'Friends Come First'

Great little story with a nice twist at the end!

nice and sweet.

at the end, well done

I read Emily's phone conversation and was about to read on but then noticed the lack of gender specific pronouns. Hmmmm. Clever girl.<P>

Thanks for sharing.

Good story and clever foreshadowing without giving away the twist that tied back very well. Just one tiny point: did Emily have red hair or strawberry blond? There is a difference.

Your plots are fresh and well designed. Keep writing!

didn't need sex. It was well done, Good foreshadowing. This was really well done. Keep writing!

Best regards C

short, sweet, and original, with a nice twist. Very well done!

Thanks, ohio

I love stories like this. Very well done. Sex scenes would have spoilt it.

Enjoyed the story! Thanks for sharing. Ohio, USA

thanks!

Even though you are a new author, all of your stories are interesting and well written. Sex or no sex, your stories are definitely worth reading. Keep on writing.

Just right length. No real need for sex scenes in this one. Nice job.

Emily, girl, you didnt lose a moment. Great short story. a great guy is a rare find. and most are already taken.

An amazing tale constructed to perfection and with the sinister mind I admire! Thank you!

Great story ! I was not sure about it when I started reading , thinking it was going to be a typical married woman bar seduction story < but you proved me wrong , Good Job !!!!! keep the stories coming .

Superbly plotted and written!

you are rapidly becoming one of my favorite writers. This went off in a direction I did NOT see...

Although I had figured it out way before the end, it was still very funny to read, especially the reactions of the other girls. A funny short story, very nice.

I liked it a lot. I hope that Emily really does console MIke and help him feel better. Thanks for the story.

Great little story with a twist I did not see coming at all!

Enjoyed the twist

...as original as Scorpio,who tends to fawn these days said. And Harry didn't see this coming?

A delightful little twist and those other girls are already "also-rans" before they even knew the race had started. Well done.

Great little story, didn't see the end coming until it got there. No sex, so what!

Didn’t see the ending at all … love it!

I seen the ending coming, but it didn't making it any less funny. Nice story. And please, I'd really like to see a humorous sequel showing Vicky's reaction to Emily and Mike hooking up.

Suckered me right to the end! nice job

Much too short but the ending was surprising.

with the unexpected twist at the end. More about Emily and Mike please.

Thanks for your hard work.

Woodmanone

teehee... snicker... snort... funny...

just goes to show friendship only goes so far.....

I'm now giggling

very entertaining. Thanks!

I had to read this again. Keep the stories coming. Thank you.

That's funny stuff right there!

Never saw that twist at the end. And the girls bailing out of the bar like a fire house just made me laugh. First in first served. Thanks for the laugh. Jim

More please, more more more.

Didn't see that twist coming. Hope you'll come with more stories.

Regards, J [drazvich(at)live(dot)com]

Please don't try to copy most everyone else on this site. Your stories are all the better for not having to slog through explicit scenes that don't really contribute to the plot. Leaving a place for the imagination is much more powerful than mere description. If all people want is graphic sex scenes, let them read in the erotic couplings section. Signed -Surreptitious

and hope its beneficial to all. TK U MLJ LV NV

The way the other Girls took so long to figure out their friend was Chasing the "Prize" lol.

Good twist-in-the-tail(tale) plot

What the fuck... What happened and where was I?

More please

Clear as crystal to me well ahead of the ladies lol -

Perfect set up and one of them was going to Mike's that night no matter what - heh

A great story with the perfect realization at the end! Well written and strong premise.

Thank you.

I liked it muchly.

Funny and sad is this tale.

What we actually have here are the future cheating wives of America.

FUCK "UM

Thanks for the smile !

Funny, clever, remarkably true. Emily is a sly one. Positioning herself like that. Well done author!

love it.

Awesome story!

Thx

First served, first come!

An excellent tale! Hilarious. Thanks.

5 Stars for a short but Humorous piece! Seems like a good variant on 'Sex and the City' ! Dan

I didn´t expect anything else . Fabulous!

A very nice story with hummer.

The surprise ending got me. I didn't see it coming.

Thanks for the laugh. Entertaining story

This has just enough to tell the story so well. *****

I guess the other three were just a little buzzed from their head-start on the drinking so it took them long enough to give Emily a head-start on Mike.

made me smile , & thats hard to do right now ,

so i thank the author for a good read .

The jerk writes like a Brit. 1* !!

This story was great!

and dear annony your the part that ran down your daddy's leg

I also agree that Anonymous is a p***k but then I would, being a Brit.

How does he 'Write like a brit'? Do you mean he writes in English? What a keen eye you have! I missed that, upon my first reading! He does indeed write using the English language, unlike your well thought out, and insightful gibberish.

English is obviously not your native language or you would easily recognize that the author was writing American English. If you took the trouble to read the author's biography, you would see that he's from Colorado.

Thanks for the offering.

eat it dear annony

Loved it!!!

Great twist at the end. Go Emily! And where can I meet her??? Made me smile and chuckle. Still smiling....

Emily's so "sweet," yet she knows about, and I presume approves of, Vicky's "indiscretions?"

LOL, the ending raised this an entire star for me!

Emily probably gave Mike a heads up about Vicky so she could get him...lol

Emily probably knows all about Jake's big cock. She's likely the one who hooked Vicky up with Jake and then arranged to have "poor Mike" informed that Vicky was hooked on getting fucked by 'Big Jake'. I'd say that Vicky and Mike are history and Emily is already riding the inside rail to the altar. Jake will get all the pussy he wants from Emily and Emily will continue getting all the cock she wants from Jake but she'll also have a nice new home, a successful husband and respectability. Conniving Cunts. Men are all for one. Women are all for them-self.

Cleverly written story. 5 stars.

Emily is smart, as well as beautiful. She's got a head start.

hilarious.

Very nice indeed. I did not see that one coming. Thanks for a good laugh, Vulcez.

Told Charlton Heston at the beginning of the chariot race "Just stay in the chariot Chuck, I guarantee you'll win the damned race." Nothing like giving the competition a heads up, and a head start. And they're off... Signed: BTW

Comments smart beautiful and head start

A great flash story. This guy can write anything.

That was awesome. Early bird catches the dick

Yes

None of the women in the story are wife material. They are too much into their slut lifestyle. If they want to get married, they need to act like a wife should. I'm not saying to stay a virgin, but they shouldn't be sleeping around either.

Nice story. The phrase is "beck and call," not "beckon call."

Really great little story, but still, someone has to nitpick an insignificant editorial mistake just to show how smart they are.

Hilarious. Loved it

Thank you!

Better hurry, girlfriends. Funny story.

Sorry girls, I think Emily has outmanoeuvred you for good! On a sidenote: Where were those kind of girls, who'd do every Tom, Harry and their dicks in a heartbeat, when I was young, virile and single? Ah well, never mind...

LMFFAO!

Yes! The Twist. And a great one it is.

Interesting lead up, but where is it going hmmmmmmmmmmmmm?

Smart scene! That was fun. I wouldn't trust any of those girls out of my sight, but it was fun.

Can't stop chuckling.... So well done with so few words. A masterpiece.

A sweet little mini saga.

A delightful little tale. Full marks.

Excellent little piece

just too funny

I was thinking this could be a nice long story tan cut short with alot of laughing at the end great turn around five

Wonderfully predictable.