There is nothing particularly bad about the writing here; it is not bad at all.. On the other hand, there is nothing particularly distinguished about the writing, theme, or plot development. Why, then, has it taken over 30 entries to reach this level? These themes have been touched on in several other stories, most of which were completed in one terse two page story. I don't think that this is just filler, but on its face, it appears so...
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Anonymous09/26/10
garbage
waste of time
by
Anonymous09/28/10
Huh?
Does the author really think that this is the first time that Annie and her son have full sex? I have no idea why all this build up for something that has already happened. I suggest that the author go back and read his own story "The Long Weekend Ch. 06" wherein Jr. has full sex with his mom WITHOUT a condom, although he pulls out when he cums.
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Save time, read the Manhattan phone book
There is nothing particularly bad about the writing here; it is not bad at all.. On the other hand, there is nothing particularly distinguished about the writing, theme, or plot development. Why, then, has it taken over 30 entries to reach this level? These themes have been touched on in several other stories, most of which were completed in one terse two page story. I don't think that this is just filler, but on its face, it appears so...
garbage
waste of time
Huh?
Does the author really think that this is the first time that Annie and her son have full sex? I have no idea why all this build up for something that has already happened. I suggest that the author go back and read his own story "The Long Weekend Ch. 06" wherein Jr. has full sex with his mom WITHOUT a condom, although he pulls out when he cums.
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