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Mustang
Mustangs were first built in 1963, 1960 models do not exist.
Proofread your work before you upload.
The 1960 Mustang is the glaring error, but there were several little glitches that detracted.
Overall not a bad story.
Really good
I really liked your story......
Keep writing you're doing a great job.
Gosh
Heyy there's no need to be so harsh. I didn't even notice and if your wrapped up in the story enough you shouldnt even notice. Plus since when have you ever read a published book that doesn't have 1 mistake. Even those that have been proof read 100s of times get printed with mistakes. Give the girl a break.
I love your writing
Honestly your talented and I will constantly check back for more of your writings. Don't worry about mistakes they are natural. Keep writing cause you have it for sure.
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