sirens

last line

surprised me, which is good.

call of the sirens

you caught my eye with your piece about poetry.. the refined insight..
and i couldn't help but to laugh when I got to the last line of this piece.. i see a lot of levels here, from the title onwards.. well done, through and through.. the fight goes on huh?

damn, live4passion - lol, if i'd have only left out the line about the paramedics

it would have fit the erotic cat! hahahaha. ty :rose:

Wow

"obscenely pummeled" doesn't sound right -shorten to and pummeled? ,as you really don't need obscenely, last line is absurd, but great, mirrors the mind. Also hope fiction.

Hm, I don't see a problem with obscenely pummeled.

Indeed, that line about paramedics should be lost. :) Funny, I didn't think about reading it that way. As always, previous comments to the rescue...