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Great story
A GREAT story. Thorougly enjoyed it and hope to see part 3, soon.
Damn
okay, im not sure what to make of this story, I like it but it seems to be missing something, I cant wait to see what happens next to poor Susan.
Gripping story telling
You certainly are good at putting an innocent in an impossible situation. Another fascinating character driven story.
Gripping story
You certainly have a knack for putting innocence into situations over their head. Another example of fascinating character driven story telling.
Well written....But
that isn't why I am waiting for the next chapter in this tale. I NEED TO FIND OUT WHAT HAPPENS NEXT, dammit.
WOW
This story is so good. You have me hooked of your writing.
enjoying your direction so far
I am enjoying the direction of this story.
Can't wait to see what happens to Susan next...
Boring
One of the most long winded boring stories I have ever read.
Not expected
That was not what I expected for some reason. I liked that he (unknown name) was starting to get a connection with her, but scaring her so badly that she forgot her cat suprised me.
Want More
Can't wait to see what happens next. Please continue.
good read
the killer is creepy - good characterization. could easily be over the top, but again your writing style mutes the opportunity for the killer to become a caricature.
it would be easy to make the woman disappear, wouldn't it? she has no ties other than work and the gym...
Overall
I like this story up to this point, after this the story sort of goes off the rails, at least in my opinion. It goes from a very interesting story about a man and a woman to some kind of political thriller. I think what you have here is the makings of two very different stories which have been unconsciously slammed together.
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